学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子需更自然、语法和时态要正确，并避免冗长或重复。注意冠词、单复数和动词形式（例如 “a well-paid job”, “after I graduate”）。回答应先简短表明身份，再补充原因或细节，最多不超过5句。可以加入连接词使逻辑更顺滑。

範例: I'm a third-year student at Dunhuang University in Shanghai, studying Intelligent Science and Technology. I chose this major because I believe it will lead to well-paid job opportunities after I graduate.

建議: 注意时态一致性（应使用现在时描述目前就读）。语法要准确（例如“provide”应为“provides”）。避免不必要的对比句过长，细节要更具体（比如校园位置、专业优势）。使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I study at Donghai University in Shanghai, which is located in the suburbs. Although it isn't among the top-ranked universities nationally, it is well regarded for its textile engineering department and provides strong training and practical programs.

建議: 回答结构清晰，但注意词汇搭配和表达自然性，例如“peaceful environment”和“beautiful scenery”（scenery通常不可数）。尽量用更具体的例子说明，如哪些资源或设施。保持句子简洁，使用连接词“firstly/secondly”时后面内容要并列且精准。

範例: Yes, I think it's a great place to study. Firstly, the campus is peaceful with beautiful scenery, which helps me relax after long study sessions. Secondly, the large library has thousands of books and online databases that support my coursework.

建議: 表达存在严重语法和词汇错误，令人难以理解（例如“Seas”误用）。应先用清晰的主句说明想要的改变，然后给出具体原因和影响，使用正确词汇（chairs, desks）。保持句子在五句以内并注意连词。

範例: Yes. I wish the school could adjust the height of the chairs in the library because they don't match the desks. As a result, many students, including me, experience back and neck discomfort when studying there.

建議: 意思表达清楚但有重复和语法错误（例如“It was it is”）。可先直接陈述计划，再说明原因并举例具体研究方向或动机。避免重复词，使用连词如 “because” 或 “so” 来增强逻辑。

範例: After I graduate, I plan to pursue a master's degree. I hope to be admitted to the University of Hong Kong because it has a strong reputation and excellent research opportunities in my field.

× I'm a third year student in Dunhuang University in Shanghai majoring in Intelligent Science and Technology.

✓ I'm a third-year student at Dunhuang University in Shanghai, majoring in Intelligent Science and Technology.

句中应使用连字符连接合成形容词“third-year”；表示就读学校时常用介词at而非in（表示在校内）；专业作为现在分词短语需与前句逗号分开。建议注意复合形容词、介词搭配和标点用法。

× I chose it because I thought it could lead me to a well paid jobs after I graduation.

✓ I chose it because I thought it could lead me to well-paid jobs after I graduate.

错误包括冠词和单复数：'a well paid jobs'中同时有不定冠词a和复数jobs，应去掉a或改为job；另外 'well-paid'作复合形容词需连字符；时态用法应为毕业后（after I graduate），而不是名词形式 'graduation'。建议：使用正确的冠词与数，复合形容词连字符，动词短语保持人称和时态一致。

× I studied at Donghai University in Shanghai, which is located in the suburbs.

✓ I study at Donghai University in Shanghai, which is located in the suburbs.

句子描述现在的学习地点，应使用现在时 'I study' 而非过去时 'I studied'。建议根据时间状语判断时态，描述当前状态用现在时。

× Although it is not one of the top ranked universities nationally, it is well regarded for its textile engineering and provide the strong training and programs.

✓ Although it is not one of the top-ranked universities nationally, it is well regarded for its textile engineering and provides strong training and programs.

错误包括复合形容词需连字符 'top-ranked'；主谓不一致：主语 'it' 对应动词应为 'provides'；不需要定冠词 'the' 在 'strong training and programs' 前。建议注意形容词连字符、主谓一致和定冠词的使用。

× Yes, I think it's a great place to study. Firstly, it has peaceful environment and beautiful sceneries where you can unwind your mind when you feel exhausted after a long time learning.

✓ Yes, I think it's a great place to study. Firstly, it has a peaceful environment and beautiful scenery where you can unwind your mind when you feel exhausted after a long period of study.

错误包括可数名词需要冠词：'peaceful environment' 前需加 'a'；'scenery' 为不可数名词，应用单数形式而非 'sceneries'；习惯搭配为 'a long period of study' 而非 'a long time learning'。建议记住可数/不可数名词的用法和常见搭配。

× Secondly, the enormous library contains thousands of resources that you can see.

✓ Secondly, the enormous library contains thousands of resources that you can access.

原句 'that you can see' 听起来不自然，图书馆的资源通常用 'access' 表示可以使用；定冠词 'the' 可保留（指特定图书馆）。建议使用更自然的搭配 'access resources'。

× Yes, I would like our school library could adjust the height of the Seas.

✓ Yes, I would like our school library to adjust the height of the seats.

原句用法混乱：'would like' 后应接不定式 'to adjust' 而不是从句 'could adjust'；单词拼写错误 'Seas' 应为 'seats'（座椅）。建议 'would like + to do' 结构，注意拼写。

× They are not compatible with the desks which can cause many physical issues and really uncomfortable for me to study there.

✓ They are not compatible with the desks, which can cause many physical issues and make it really uncomfortable for me to study there.

原句主从句结构问题：'which' 引导的非限制性定语从句应与前面整个情形相关，动词 'can cause' 后需要并列谓语 'make it really uncomfortable' 来说明结果；此外 'really uncomfortable for me to study there' 需要用 'make it ... for me to ...' 结构。建议使用合适的并列谓语与形式 'make it + adj + for sb to do'。

× After I graduate, I plan to enter a master's program.

✓ After I graduate, I plan to enter a master's program.

该句本身时态正确（使用一般现在时表将来计划在时间状语 'After I graduate' 后），无需修改。说明：用现在时表将来计划是可以接受的。

× I wish I could be admitted by the University of Hong Kong.

✓ I hope I can be admitted to the University of Hong Kong.

动词 'be admitted' 通常与介词 'to' 连用而非 'by'（'by' 用于被...录取指人或机构作为施动者时可见，但更自然用 'admitted to'）；此外 'I wish I could' 在表达现实可能性时不如 'I hope I can' 自然。建议使用 'be admitted to' 或 'get into' 来表达被录取。

× It was it is my dream school with a high reputation and the research opportunities.

✓ It is my dream school because of its high reputation and research opportunities.

原句含有重复 'It was it is' 及语序混乱；应使用 'It is my dream school because of ...' 来表达原因；'research opportunities' 前不需要定冠词 'the'。建议避免重复、使用连接词 'because of' 并注意冠词使用。