学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct minor grammar (use articles and word order). Add a brief supporting detail (e.g., year and focus) with linking words.

範例: I'm a third-year university student majoring in pharmaceutical engineering. Currently, I focus on drug formulation and laboratory research, so most of my time is spent on experiments and coursework.

建議: Answer directly and avoid repeating information already given. Use a clear topic sentence about the location, then add one specific detail about the campus using a linking word.

範例: I study at a university in Gimhae. Although it's not far from the city center, the campus has specialized labs and a quiet study environment for science students.

建議: Begin with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because/for example). Avoid vague phrases and keep it concise.

範例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because our major building is new and well-equipped. For example, it has modern laboratories and several quiet study rooms for group work and individual study.

建議: Provide a clear answer (Yes/No/Sometimes), then explain briefly with a specific suggestion for change and link ideas smoothly. Avoid saying 'etcetera'—give concrete examples.

範例: Sometimes — I would like more variety in comfortable study spaces on campus. For instance, adding a few small cafés or breakout zones would help students who prefer a different atmosphere than the library.

建議: Make the plan specific and grammatically correct. Start with a clear statement of your goal, then give reasons and concrete actions (where, what, or how). Use linking words for coherence.

範例: I plan to excel in my major and apply for an international exchange or graduate program. Because pharmaceutical engineering is globally relevant, I hope to study abroad in a country with strong pharmaceutical research, such as Germany or the Netherlands, to gain research experience.

× I'm currently a student in university and my major is pharmaceutical engineering and a third year in my major now.

✓ I'm currently a university student majoring in Pharmaceutical Engineering, and I am in my third year.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundancy. 'student in university' should be 'university student' (noun phrase order). Use 'majoring in' or 'my major is' but not both; 'majoring in Pharmaceutical Engineering' is more natural. 'a third year in my major now' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I am in my third year.' Combine clauses with a comma and coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× My university is located in Kimhae and I'm third year student in my major called Pharmaceutical Engineering.

✓ My university is located in Gimhae, and I'm a third-year student majoring in Pharmaceutical Engineering.

Need the article 'a' before 'third-year student' and hyphenate 'third-year' when used as a compound adjective. 'Kimhae' is commonly spelled 'Gimhae' in English. Use 'majoring in' rather than 'in my major called' for natural phrasing. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses.

× I think so because my major building is the newest building in my university and there are a lot of places to study for our major students.

✓ I think so because the building for my major is the newest on campus, and there are many places for students in my major to study.

Use the definite article 'the' for a specific building. 'in my university' is less natural than 'on campus.' 'a lot of' is informal; 'many' is better here. 'our major students' is awkward; use 'students in my major.' Also split into clearer clauses.

× Sometimes because I don't like to study in same places every day so I usually change my place like cafe, library etcetera.

✓ Sometimes. I don't like studying in the same place every day, so I usually change locations, such as a cafe or the library.

Original is a run-on and lacks articles: 'the same place' needs 'the'. Use gerund 'studying' after 'like.' 'Change my place' is unnatural; use 'change locations.' 'Cafe' and 'library' need articles or 'such as a cafe or the library.' Avoid 'etcetera' in spoken answers; give a couple examples instead.

× I want to do my best in my major and I want to go to abroad related to my major because my major is especially realized in many countries so I want to go abroad.

✓ I want to do my best in my major and study abroad in areas related to my field because my major is especially well established in many countries, so I want to go abroad.

'Go to abroad' is incorrect; use 'study abroad' or 'go abroad.' 'Related to my major' fits better as 'in areas related to my field.' 'Especially realized' is incorrect collocation; use 'especially well established' or 'widely recognized.' Also combine and reorder clauses to avoid repetition of 'I want to go abroad.'