学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence stating you are a student, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., "I will graduate this year", "I plan to study in Japan") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to show reasons.

範例: I am a senior in high school and I will graduate this year. I plan to study in Japan because their universities offer strong programs in business, so I need to prepare and study hard to pass the entrance exams.

建議: Give a direct, specific answer: name the type of school or location and add one brief detail about it. Avoid fillers like "uh" and one-word responses. Use a linking phrase if you add a reason or description.

範例: I study at my local public high school in my hometown. It's a typical campus with classrooms and a small library, which I use for revision after classes.

建議: Be specific and coherent: give a clear opinion, then explain with two concrete reasons. Avoid vague or unclear phrases and remove filler words. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to make the explanation logical.

範例: I wouldn't say it's a very good place to study because the classrooms are crowded and the library has limited resources. For example, it's often noisy during study periods, which makes concentrating difficult.

建議: Answer the question directly about changes you want at your current school. State one or two specific changes and explain why they would help. Use linking words like "so" or "because" and avoid confusing references to studying in Japan here.

範例: Yes, I would like my school to improve its library and study spaces because a quieter, better-equipped library would help students prepare for exams more effectively.

建議: Give a clear plan: state where and what you will study, then give a specific reason or background. Correct grammar (e.g., "I have wanted to major in digital marketing since I was a child"). Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so".

範例: I plan to study in Japan and major in business with a focus on digital marketing because I have been interested in online marketing since I was a child. Therefore, I am preparing for language and entrance exams to reach that goal.

× I'm in my senior year of high school.

✓ I'm in my senior year of high school.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present continuous to describe a current ongoing status.

× This year I will Graduate School.

✓ This year I will graduate from high school.

Incorrect verb form and missing preposition. 'Graduate' should be lowercase and followed by 'from' when specifying graduating from an institution. Also specify 'high school' to be clear.

× Now I'm planning to study Japan.

✓ Now I'm planning to study in Japan.

Missing preposition 'in' before the country. After 'study' when indicating a location, use 'in'. The present continuous 'I'm planning' is correct.

× You know, it's not easy to get into university, that's why I have to study hard.

✓ You know, it's not easy to get into university, so I have to study hard.

Run-on sentence: two independent clauses joined incorrectly with a comma. Use a coordinating conjunction such as 'so' or separate with a semicolon or period.

× Now I study in school, uh.

✓ I currently study at my school.

Use 'currently' or 'now' and preposition 'at' with 'school' is more natural. 'Study in school' is grammatically odd in this context.

× Frankly speaking, I wouldn't say it's good place to study.

✓ Frankly speaking, I wouldn't say it's a good place to study.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'good place' is needed for singular countable noun.

× Uh, my school, uh, it's not convenient for me all the time.

✓ My school isn't convenient for me all the time.

Redundant filler words and incorrect comma splice. Combine subject and verb correctly: 'My school isn't convenient...'.

× Our teacher is, uh, our teacher is not to study.

✓ Our teachers are not helpful for studying.

Original sentence is ungrammatical. Likely meaning: teachers do not support or facilitate studying. Use plural 'teachers' if referring to staff and rephrase to convey intent: 'not helpful for studying'.

× Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

✓ Would you like the place where you study to make any changes?

No change needed; question correctly uses 'would you like' to ask about preferences for changes.

× Yeah, I would like to change my study, which is Japan.

✓ Yes, I would like to study in Japan.

Awkward phrasing 'change my study' and 'which is Japan'. Use direct and natural phrasing 'study in Japan'.

× You know, Japanese school is really amazing for all students, the year, the year structure.

✓ Japanese schools are really good for students because of their yearly structure.

Use plural 'schools' when speaking generally, and clarify 'yearly structure'. Original has repetition and awkward phrasing.

× Now I'm planning to study in Japan.

✓ Now I'm planning to study in Japan.

Sentence is correct; present continuous 'I'm planning' appropriately expresses a current plan.

× You know, it's not easy, uh, study in Japan.

✓ You know, it's not easy to study in Japan.

Use infinitive 'to study' after 'it's not easy' rather than bare verb 'study'.

× That's why I have to study very hard.

✓ That's why I have to study very hard.

Sentence is correct: present simple 'have to' for obligation is appropriate.

× I want to uh, major in business, digital marketing since child.

✓ I have wanted to major in business, specifically digital marketing, since I was a child.

Timeline requires present perfect 'have wanted' to indicate desire from past to present. 'Since child' is incorrect; use 'since I was a child' or 'since childhood'. Also clarify phrasing and add 'specifically' for clarity.