学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答直接且明确，但句子结构和用词可更自然流畅。可以把目的和时间信息稍作扩展并使用连接词，使答案更完整（例如说明什么时候申请或为什么去中国）。注意语法：'to go to Graduate School' 可改为 'to attend graduate school' 或 'to apply for graduate school'。

範例: I'm currently a student, and I'm preparing to apply for graduate school in China next year because I want to specialize in printmaking.

建議: 回答有信息但句子未分割且缺少连接词，听起来有些口语碎片。应先给出主题句，然后用连接词补充原因。注意标点和句子完整性，限制在最多5句内。

範例: I usually study in my bedroom because it's quiet and free from distractions, which helps me concentrate for long periods.

建議: 回答包含理由但语法和连贯性有待改进。注意主谓一致（'there are a lot of electronic devices'）和连接词使用（如 'and' 或 'so'）。可以加入更具体的例子说明哪些设备或资源有帮助。

範例: Yes, it's very convenient because I can grab food easily and use devices like my laptop and tablet to access online resources and lecture notes.

建議: 回答过于口语化且有重复（'all the devices can meet all my needs'）。避免俚语（如 'Nope'）并用更自然的表达。提供一两个具体例子来支持观点，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: No, I'm satisfied with it because my devices — an iPod, a phone and a laptop — provide everything I need for studying and researching online.

建議: 信息明确但表达有语法错误和逻辑问题（'in my undergraduate school' 应更正）。应先给出主题句，然后补充具体细节如时间、地点或原因。尽量用正确的词组：'pursue a master's degree in printmaking' 或 'specialize in printmaking at graduate school'。

範例: I plan to pursue a master's degree in printmaking, preferably at the university where I completed my undergraduate studies, because I want to deepen my technical skills and artistic research.

× Student: I'm currently a student and preparing to go to Graduate School in China.

✓ I'm currently a student and am preparing to go to graduate school in China.

句子中第一个分句是现在进行时（I'm currently a student），第二个分句缺少助动词“am”来构成现在进行时的并列结构。应在“preparing”前加上“am”以保持时态一致并构成完整谓语。建议在并列动词短语中保持助动词一致或使用并列结构（例如“and am preparing”）。此外，“Graduate School”不需要大写中间单词，写成“graduate school”。

× Student: Actually most of the time I study in my bedroom I think is quiet and free from distractions.

✓ Actually, most of the time I study in my bedroom because I think it is quiet and free from distractions.

原句是两个分句直接相连，缺少连接词且指代不明（“is quiet”缺少主语）。应加入连接词“because”或用句号分开，并在“is quiet”前加主语“it”。建议使用连接词或分句并确保每个谓语有明确主语。

× Student: Yes, of course is very convenient because I can grab some food in my house whenever I want and there are a lot of electronic device, so it provides plenty of resources on the Internet.

✓ Yes, of course it is very convenient because I can grab some food in my house whenever I want and there are a lot of electronic devices, so it provides plenty of resources on the Internet.

句首“of course is very convenient”缺少主语，应补“it”。另外“electronic device”与“a lot of”不一致，应使用复数“electronic devices”。主谓一致和单复数需要保持一致。建议确保每个谓语前有明确主语并正确使用复数形式。

× Student: Nope, I think it's quite enough because all the devices can meet all my needs such as I got iPod, phones and laptops so I'm happy with that.

✓ Nope, I think it's quite enough because all the devices can meet my needs; for example, I have an iPod, phones, and laptops, so I'm happy with that.

原句中“such as I got iPod...”结构不自然且时态/表达混杂。使用“such as”后应接名词或名词短语，而不是完整子句；“I got”应改为现在时“I have”或“I have got”，且“an iPod”需要冠词。建议用“for example”或改写为“I have an iPod, phones, and laptops”。此外不必重复“all my needs”的“all”。

× Student: My plan is to pursue the masters degree specialized in printmaking in my undergraduate school.

✓ My plan is to pursue a master's degree specializing in printmaking at my undergraduate school.

原句中有多个问题：需要不定冠词“a”并使用所有格“master's degree”；“specialized in”位置和形式不当，改为现在分词短语“specializing in”或将“in printmaking”直接修饰；表示地点应使用介词“at”。建议使用固定搭配“pursue a master's degree specializing in ... at ...”。