学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要更符合语法并更简洁，第一句用现在时态并补全冠词和动词（例如“I am still a student”）。描述兼职时用一致的时态并用连接词使句子连贯（例如 and，用 because 简要说明原因）。避免冗长重复，控制在最多五句内。

範例: I am currently a university student, but I also work part-time at Decathlon, a sports goods store. I work in the team sports and rackets departments, helping customers choose equipment and restock shelves. I usually go there in my spare time because the hours fit around my classes.

建議: 回答需更流畅并减少填充词（uh, umm）。直接给出校名和专业，用简洁的结构说明专业方向（use present simple）。用连接词如 especially 或 focusing on 来引出具体方向。

範例: I study at Beijing Agricultural University, where I am majoring in Environmental Management. My focus is on agricultural resources and energy, particularly on sustainable use and conservation methods.

建議: 保持积极评价时注意单复数和搭配（a great place, gain knowledge）。避免笼统形容词如 "rich and colourful" 没有具体说明，建议举一两个具体例子支持观点，并用连接词如 because 和 therefore 使逻辑清楚。

範例: Yes, it's a great place to study because the university has a strong academic atmosphere and many student clubs. For example, there are regular seminars in my faculty and diverse extracurricular societies, so you can both gain knowledge and develop your hobbies.

建議: 问题问的是是否希望学校做出改变，但回答偏向个人计划（study abroad）。先直接回答“yes/no”并简短说明想改变的具体方面（如更多国际交流机会），减少时态错误（I will go to Australia; I am really interested）。使用连续、明确的理由并控制在五句内。

範例: Yes, I would like the university to offer more international exchange programs, because they would allow students to experience different academic cultures. For example, I plan to study in Australia in my final year to broaden my perspective and communicate with people who think differently.

建議: 回答要用一致的时态（I want/I plan/I aim），并用清晰结构列出计划。说明选专业的具体原因时要语法正确（because it aligns with my job and hobbies）。避免“two different major”这种不明确的表达，要明确是 double major or change major。

範例: First, I aim to complete my undergraduate degree. Then I plan to continue studying in Australia, possibly pursuing a double major in Sports Management and Media, because these fields align with my part-time job and interests in sports and communication.

× I still a student studying in university, but I have a part time job at a decathlon, a sports goods company.

✓ I am still a student studying at university, but I have a part-time job at Decathlon, a sports goods company.

问题类型：句子结构/缺少谓语动词（属于列表中26：Sentence structure errors）。原句缺少系动词“am”，而且“part time”应连字成“part-time”，“in university”更常用“at university”，公司名称首字母大写。建议在陈述身份时使用完整的主系表结构：主语 + 系动词 + 表语；复合名词用连字符；机构名称首字母大写。

× I worked in the team sports and a rackets department and I go there to work in my spare time.

✓ I work in the team sports and rackets departments, and I go there to work in my spare time.

问题类型：动词过去分词/时态错误（列表中9和6：此处主要为时态不一致，归为6：Present tense issue 以及9：Verb in the past participle form）。学生用了“worked”（过去）与现在情况不符，应使用一般现在时“work”；并且“a rackets department”要改为复数或并列名词“rackets departments”。建议保持时态一致，用一般现在时描述现在的工作，并使用正确的名词形式。

× I started in the Beijing, uh, my university is uh, Beijing Agriculture University, umm, my major is umm, uh, environmental management, especially focus on the agricultural resources and energy.

✓ I study in Beijing. My university is Beijing Agricultural University. My major is environmental management, especially focusing on agricultural resources and energy.

问题类型：介词与动名词形式错误（列表中11和10：Verb in the present participle form）。原句“started in the Beijing”不合语境，应为“study in Beijing”；“Beijing Agriculture University”应为“Beijing Agricultural University”；“especially focus on”需要动名词“focusing on”。建议使用简单句分开表达，地点用“in Beijing”，专业后用动名词短语“focusing on…”来表示重点。

× Yes, I think it's a great places to study because this university has a strong academic atmosphere besides our after school life.

✓ Yes, I think it's a great place to study because this university has a strong academic atmosphere besides our after-school life.

问题类型：形容词/副词使用及单复数（列表中13与1）。原句“a great places”主词单数与复数不一致，应为“a great place”；“after school life”作为复合名词应用连字符“after-school life”。建议注意冠词和名词的单复数一致，以及复合形容词或名词的正确写法。

× It's also very rich and colourful. Therefore, you can gain many knowledge here and develop your hobbies at the same time.

✓ It's also very rich and colourful. Therefore, you can gain a lot of knowledge here and develop your hobbies at the same time.

问题类型：动名词/名词用法错误（列表中10和13）。“many knowledge”不正确，knowledge是不可数名词，应使用“a lot of knowledge”或“much knowledge”。建议区分可数与不可数名词，使用合适的量词。

× Actually, I really want to study abroad and I will go to the Australia in my final years in it is calling university to experience a different kind of academic life.

✓ Actually, I really want to study abroad and I will go to Australia in my final year to study at a university there to experience a different kind of academic life.

问题类型：情态动词/将来时与冠词错误（列表中4、7、22）。原句“The Australia”不需要定冠词，应为“Australia”；“in my final years”应为“in my final year”；“in it is calling university”是语序和结构错误，应改为“to study at a university there”。建议注意国家名前不用定冠词、固定时间表达单位的单复数以及不完整或混乱的短语需用清晰的动词不定式结构表达目的。

× I was really interesting to acquire knowledge and communicate with people who have different ways of thinking.

✓ I am really interested in acquiring knowledge and communicating with people who have different ways of thinking.

问题类型：过去时/形容词与动词形式错误（列表中5和13和8）。原句“I was really interesting”把说话者误作“有趣”，正确应为“I am really interested in...”；动词后接动名词形式“acquiring/communicating”。建议用“be interested in + -ing”结构表达兴趣，并保持现在时描述当前愿望。

× First of all, I aim to complete my undergraduate studies. Secondly, I wanted to continue my studies in Australia through two different major.

✓ First of all, I aim to complete my undergraduate studies. Secondly, I want to continue my studies in Australia with two different majors.

问题类型：时态与数（列表中7和1）。原句“wanted”使用了过去式，应与现在目标一致用“want”；“two different major”应为复数“majors”。建议使用现在时描述未来计划的意图，并保持名词单复数一致。

× My target major is the sports management and media and because it's aligns perfectly with my job hobbies.

✓ My target majors are sports management and media because they align perfectly with my job and hobbies.

问题类型：定冠词/主谓一致/结构（列表中17与27）。原句“the sports management and media”不需要定冠词，且“is”与复数主语不一致，应改为复数“majors are... they align”。另外“job hobbies”不自然，应分开为“job and hobbies”或“job-related hobbies”。建议明确主语是复数时使用复数动词，并注意冠词使用和并列名词的表达。