学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 语言较明白但有语法和用词错误，句子略冗。应注意动词时态和被动/主动形式，开头直接表明身份即可，后面用一到两句补充细节并控制在最多五句内。可练习把“have been studied”改为“I have been studying”或更自然的“I have studied”。

範例: I'm a senior studying accounting at Harbin University of Commerce. I have studied accounting for about four years and I will graduate this year.

建議: 存在地名和介词使用错误（Harvard→Harbin；associated/in）。应直接用现在时说明学校位置，保持句子简洁并用连接词增强连贯性。注意拼写（Heilongjiang）。

範例: I study at Harbin University of Commerce in Heilongjiang province. I major in accounting, and I like the campus because it is compact and well connected to the city center.

建議: 内容意图明确但表达混乱、词汇搭配错误多（naturalized seating? make not study sections? availability of the appearance of tutors）。应用更准确的词汇和清晰的句子，使用连接词如 'for example' 后给出具体、相关的例子。每句控制在一到两层信息。

範例: Yes, it's a good place to study because the campus is quiet and has well-equipped libraries. For example, there are plenty of comfortable seats and quiet study rooms, and helpful tutors are available to support deeper learning.

建議: 有用意但词汇和语法错误（compass→campus；improve the lighting would reduce ice strain→eye strain；non study sections→non-study periods）。回答应更简洁并用连接词如 'for example'、'also' 来组织原因和建议。

範例: Yes. I'd like the campus to enforce quieter rules and provide more comfortable seating because the library is often overcrowded. For example, creating dedicated silent rooms during exams and improving lighting would reduce eye strain and help students concentrate.

建議: 表达目标明确但存在词汇和语法错误（continue my series→continue my studies；the developer advanced skills→develop advanced skills）。建议用清晰的短句说明目的和收益，并使用连接词如 'because' 或 'so that' 来表明原因。

範例: I plan to continue my studies with a master's degree in accounting because I want to deepen my understanding of accounting processes and develop advanced skills in financial reporting and auditing. This qualification will improve my career prospects and help me apply for senior roles in finance.

× I'm currently a senior at Harbin University of Commerce majoring in accounting. I've been studied this major for about four years and I'm going to graduate this year.

✓ I'm currently a senior at Harbin University of Commerce majoring in accounting. I've been studying this major for about four years and I'm going to graduate this year.

句中“I've been studied”时态和形式错误。这里要用现在完成进行时表持续的学习经历，正确结构为“have/has been + 动词-ing”，因此应改为“I've been studying”。建议：当强调动作从过去一直持续到现在并可能继续，用“have/has been + 动词-ing”。

× I studied at Harvard University of Commerce associated in Harbin in Heinongjiang province. I'm currently majoring in accounting and I like the campus because it is compact and well connected to the city center.

✓ I study at Harbin University of Commerce, affiliated in Harbin in Heilongjiang province. I'm currently majoring in accounting and I like the campus because it is compact and well connected to the city center.

句中“Harvard University of Commerce associated in Harbin in Heinongjiang province”存在地名拼写、介词和搭配错误。应使用“affiliated in/with”或更自然的“located in”，省名拼写为“Heilongjiang”。“studied”与上下文现在进行不符，改为现在时“study”。建议：注意地名拼写和常用搭配（located/affiliated）。

× For example, there are plenty of naturalized and comfortable seating which make not study sections more productive.

✓ For example, there are plenty of natural and comfortable seats which make non-study sections more productive.

原句使用“naturalized”和“seating”与上下文不搭配，且“make not study sections”词序和词形错误。应改为“natural and comfortable seats”或“comfortable seating areas”，并用“non-study sections”表示“非学习时段/场合”。建议：区分不可数名词“seating”和可数名词“seats”，并使用正确的复合形容词或短语。

× The availability of the appearance of tutors under academic resources support deeper learnings.

✓ The availability of tutors and academic resources supports deeper learning.

原句结构冗余且主谓不一致：“The availability ... support”主语是单数“availability”，谓语需用“supports”。“the appearance of tutors under academic resources”措辞不自然，应简化为“availability of tutors and academic resources”。“learnings”通常用不可数名词“learning”。建议：理顺主语成分，确保主谓一致并使用自然搭配。

× Yes, I would like my compass to have more quiet study rules and comfortable seating as the current library is often overcrowded and noisy.

✓ Yes, I would like my campus to have quieter study rules and more comfortable seating as the current library is often overcrowded and noisy.

原句将“campus”误写为“compass”，且“quiet study rules”需要比较级“quieter”或表达“stricter quiet rules”，另外“comfortable seating”前应加“more”以表示增加。建议：注意拼写并根据比较语境使用比较级或增加词。

× For example, dedicated silent rooms would help students focus during exam periods and improve the lighting would reduce ice strain during non study sections.

✓ For example, dedicated silent rooms would help students focus during exam periods, and improved lighting would reduce eye strain during non-study periods.

原句“improve the lighting would reduce ice strain”句法错误，且“ice strain”是拼写错误，应为“eye strain”。应把两个并列想法用连词连接并调整为“improved lighting would reduce eye strain”。“non study sections”改为“non-study periods”。建议：检查拼写并保持并列句子结构一致。

× I plan to continue my series with a master's degree in accounting because I want to deepen my understanding of how accounting processes work and the developer advanced skills in financial reporting and auditing.

✓ I plan to continue my studies with a master's degree in accounting because I want to deepen my understanding of how accounting processes work and to develop advanced skills in financial reporting and auditing.

原句“continue my series”用词错误，应该是“continue my studies”。“the developer advanced skills”语法和词形错误，应为“to develop advanced skills”。建议：注意常用搭配（continue studies）和动词不定式结构并列（and to develop）。

× This qualification will enhance my career prospects and allow me to apply for more senior roles in finance.

✓ This qualification will enhance my career prospects and allow me to apply for more senior roles in finance.

该句语法正确，无需修改。提供说明：句子结构正确，时态和主谓一致均恰当。