学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundant phrases. Correct grammar (use “a bachelor’s degree” and name of university type) and keep to 1–2 sentences. Add a brief supporting detail if needed.

範例: I’m currently a student studying for a bachelor’s degree in English at a government university. I’m focusing on improving my speaking and writing skills to prepare for a teaching career.

建議: Be concise and grammatically correct. Use singular/plural properly and avoid repetition. Give one specific detail (e.g., campus location or a distinctive feature) to enrich the answer.

範例: I study at the University of Dhaka, a well-known institution located in the city center. Its main campus has historic buildings and a large student community.

建議: Remove fillers (uh), correct word choice and grammar, and use linking words smoothly. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give specific examples of facilities and how they help studying.

範例: Yes, it’s an excellent place to study because it offers many facilities. For example, the large library and quiet study rooms make it easy to concentrate, and the sports ground helps students relax between classes.

建議: Answer the question directly (state whether you would like changes). Avoid run-on sentences and unclear phrases. Mention a specific change you would like and why, using linking words to explain the effect.

範例: I would like some changes to the library layout. For instance, although the new shelving improves organization, I think adding more individual study carrels and better lighting would help students concentrate more effectively.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence and give specific reasons. Use natural phrases (e.g., “study abroad to gain international experience”) and correct collocations (cultural heritage). Limit to 2–3 clear sentences.

範例: In the future, I plan to study abroad to gain international experience and improve my English. This would allow me to meet people from different backgrounds and learn about other cultures and educational approaches.

× Currently, I consider myself as a student who is pursuing bachelor's degree from a laboratory university in my country, while my major is English.

✓ Currently, I consider myself a student who is pursuing a bachelor's degree at a laboratory university in my country, and my major is English.

Use of articles: 'a student' not 'as a student'. 'a bachelor's degree' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Use preposition 'at' for institutions rather than 'from' for studying at a university. Also replace 'while' with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'as' and add 'a' before 'bachelor's degree', use 'at' and simpler conjunctions.

× I study at Dhaka University, which is highly famous educational institutions in my country located in the center of my country.

✓ I study at Dhaka University, which is a highly famous educational institution in my country and is located in the center of the country.

Subject-verb agreement and article errors: 'which' refers to a singular noun (Dhaka University), so use singular 'institution' not plural 'institutions'. Add article 'a' before 'highly famous educational institution'. Use 'is located' to give a complete clause. Avoid repeating 'my country' twice; use 'the country'.

× Definitely, it's an excellent place for studies because, uh, it provides a lot of facilities, for instance, library, uh, large playground and also and additional study room where Stu students can study concentrately.

✓ Definitely, it's an excellent place to study because it provides many facilities, for instance, a library, a large playground and an additional study room where students can study with concentration.

Word choice and articles: 'place to study' is more natural than 'place for studies'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for countable facilities. Add articles 'a' before 'library' and 'large playground' and 'an' before 'additional study room'. Correct spelling 'students'. 'Concentrately' is not natural; use 'with concentration' or 'concentratedly' (rare). Suggestion: simplify and use standard collocations.

× Of course, I love the library at my university where is a great place to study and recently there has been few changes the direction of bookshelves are converted.

✓ Of course, I love the library at my university, which is a great place to study, and recently there have been a few changes: the direction of the bookshelves has been changed.

Sentence structure and verb agreement: Use 'which is' to describe the library. 'There have been a few changes' uses plural agreement; include article 'a'. The second part needs to be a clause: 'the direction of the bookshelves has been changed' or 'the bookshelves have been turned'. Use appropriate verb tense and agreement ('has been changed' for 'direction' or 'have been turned' for 'bookshelves'). Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× If I talk about myself in the future, I plan to study abroad because by studying abroad I can enrich my global connectivity and also I can learn different kinds of cultural and heritage.

✓ If I talk about my future, I plan to study abroad because, by studying abroad, I can enrich my global connections and also learn about different kinds of cultures and heritage.

Tense and word choice: 'If I talk about myself in the future' is awkward; 'talk about my future' is natural. 'Global connectivity' is better as 'global connections'. Avoid repeating 'I can': use parallel structure 'can enrich... and learn...'. Use 'cultures' (plural) and 'heritage' without 'and' before it if referring to both; 'learn about' fits both. Add commas for clarity.