学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and clear: begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g. "I am a student") and then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words ("umm") and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar for institutions and intentions ("Police State University", "motivates me to become independent").

範例: I am a student at Police State University. My studies are demanding, so life is quite stressful, but the university provides a strong legal education that motivates me to become independent in my career.

建議: Start with a clear, direct sentence naming the place you study, then give one or two concrete supporting details. Avoid unclear vocabulary ("implicit") and mixed ideas. Use linking words ("and", "because", "however") to connect points logically.

範例: I study at Police State University in the city, but I come from a small town called Zestaponi. I like studying law here because the faculty is strong and the university has a good reputation.

建議: Answer directly: say yes or no and immediately explain why with specific reasons. Remove fillers and unclear phrases. Mention concrete aspects (quality of lectures, resources, career opportunities) and link them ("because", "however").

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the lectures are taught by experienced professors and there are many opportunities for internships with local law firms.

建議: Make one clear suggestion and explain why. Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Use correct terms ("examination halls", "administration") and give a specific improvement and its expected benefit.

範例: Yes. I would improve the administration and examination facilities because better organization and more modern exam halls would reduce stress and improve students' performance.

建議: Start with a clear statement of your plan (e.g. "I plan to do a master's abroad"), then give specific reasons and steps (which country, subject, tests you will take). Use correct terms ("master's degree", "entrance exams", "IELTS/TOEFL") and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: I plan to study for a master's degree abroad, probably in the UK, focusing on international law. To prepare, I am improving my English and aiming to get a high IELTS score for admission.

× I am lost student and I am studying in the police State University and my student life is very stressful but I also UMM but it also gives me a really good UMM education and motivate me to became my own.

✓ I am a lost student and I am studying at the Police State University. My student life is very stressful, but it also gives me a really good education and motivates me to become independent.

Missing article 'a' before 'lost student' (article error/ adjective use), incorrect preposition 'in' should be 'at' for institutions (preposition), 'police State University' should be capitalized and ordered 'Police State University' (adjective/noun order), repeated filler 'UMM' removed, 'motivate me to became my own' uses wrong verb forms: 'motivate' needs third-person singular 'motivates' to agree with 'it', and 'became' (past tense) should be infinitive 'become'; 'my own' changed to 'independent' for correct adjective use and clarity. Suggestion: use articles correctly, choose proper prepositions for places, match verb forms (subject-verb agreement) and use infinitive after verbs like 'motivate'.

× I'm standing in to be the same, but I am from a really small town.

✓ I'm standing to be the same, but I am from a really small town.

The phrase is unclear; 'standing in to be the same' likely misuses prepositions. If intended meaning is 'I intend to stay the same' or 'I stand by my decision', choose a clearer structure. Here correction kept minimal by removing extra 'in'. Suggestion: replace with a clearer expression such as 'I'm likely to stay here' or 'I intend to stay the same' depending on intended meaning.

× I'm from Zestapoli and I am really implicit because of my minority is here.

✓ I'm from Zestapoli and I feel marginalized because I am a member of a minority here.

'Implicit' is incorrect adjective for intended meaning; likely 'marginalized' or 'insecure' fits. 'Because of my minority is here' is ungrammatical; use 'because I am a member of a minority' or 'because my minority status is here'. Suggestion: use correct adjectives to express feelings and form subordinate clauses properly (subject + verb).

× But I like it because some it's really good to studying law, the most successful university.

✓ But I like it because it is really good for studying law; it is one of the most successful universities.

'Some it's' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'it is' or 'it' instead. 'Good to studying' should be 'good for studying' (preposition with gerund). 'The most successful university' likely needs qualification ('one of the most successful universities'). Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('for studying') and proper noun phrases when making comparisons.

× It depends on how you look at the umm, opportunities that university gives you.

✓ It depends on how you look at the opportunities that the university gives you.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'university' when referring to a specific institution. Also extra filler 'umm' removed. Suggestion: include articles for specificity and avoid filler words in formal answers.

× Because, uh, the places take. University is the place where umm, the lectures, umm are really good and lecture are lawyer prose.

✓ The university is a place where the lectures are really good and the lecturers are professional lawyers.

Sentence fragments and filler words removed. 'The places take' is meaningless; likely intended 'the university'. 'Lecture are lawyer prose' is incorrect: 'lectures' (classes) take place, but intended meaning is 'lecturers are professional lawyers' or 'lectures are delivered by lawyers'. Use correct nouns and plural agreement. Suggestion: form complete sentences, remove fillers, and match nouns with correct descriptors.

× Umm, I think that would be great if here will be more on good on me, uh, examine holes and uh, administrative system is not really good to at my university.

✓ I think it would be great if there were more examination halls, and the administrative system at my university were improved.

Incorrect future construction 'here will be more' in conditional: use past subjunctive 'were' after 'if' for hypothetical present/future. 'Examine holes' is a misspelling of 'examination halls'. 'Administrative system is not really good to at my university' has preposition errors; use 'at my university' and passive/improved phrasing. Suggestion: use correct conditional structures ('would' + 'if' + past subjunctive), correct nouns, and proper prepositions.

× My favorite study place is some I want to study abroad for my master degree and from my bachelor degree and I want to improve my English because I need to get good grade denials exam for my future study plans.

✓ My main plan is to study abroad for my master's degree after my bachelor's degree. I also want to improve my English because I need to get good grades in the entrance exam for my future studies.

Unclear phrasing 'favorite study place is some' corrected to 'My main plan is'. 'Master degree' should be 'master's degree' and 'from my bachelor degree' should be 'after my bachelor's degree'. 'Good grade denials exam' is unclear; likely 'good grades in the entrance exam'. Use plural 'grades' and 'entrance exam'. Suggestion: use correct degree forms (bachelor's, master's), sequence words ('after'), and standard collocations ('get good grades in the entrance exam').