学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two concise supporting details (where you study and year). Avoid unnecessary or unclear words (e.g., correct department name). Use linking words only if adding one extra detail.

範例: I am a final-year undergraduate student studying Information Technology at Chennai Smart University in the Faculty of Applied Sciences. I am currently in my second semester of the last year.

建議: Be concise and chronological: give the location, how long you have been there, and one clear detail about your study path. Use correct tense and reduce repetition. Link sentences with words like 'then' or 'after that' when describing sequence.

範例: I study in Turkey and I have been here for five years. I first completed a one-year Turkish language foundation course, and then I began my bachelor's degree in Information Technology, which I am now finishing.

建議: Answer clearly with balanced opinion: give a direct topic sentence (yes/no and reason), then one or two specific supporting points using linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Avoid unclear words ('externalities').

範例: Overall, my university is a good place to study, but the campus location is inconvenient. The campus is quite far from the city center, so students usually need to live nearby or face long commutes.

建議: Give a clear proposal: start with a topic sentence stating you would like changes, then specify one or two concrete improvements and why they matter, using linking words such as 'for example' or 'therefore'. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'changes', 'sports center').

範例: Yes, I would like to see several changes to benefit students. For example, the university could build a sports center and more green spaces so students have places to exercise and relax between classes.

建議: Provide a clear, well-structured plan: begin with your immediate status, then state your next step (applying for a master’s), where and why, and one detail about your preparations. Avoid unclear phrases and keep it to two or three sentences.

範例: I am finishing my bachelor's degree, and after graduation I plan to apply for a master's program in a European country. To prepare, I am taking the required entrance exams and gathering application documents so I can choose the best offer when I receive admission results.

× I'm a student of an IT at Chennai Colonseki Smart University, Faculty of Applied Science, Department of International children.

✓ I'm a student of IT at Chennai Colonseki Smart University, Faculty of Applied Science, Department of International Relations.

The original sentence has incorrect article use and awkward noun phrases. 'an IT' is wrong because IT (information technology) is an uncountable field, so no article is needed. 'Department of International children' is incorrect word choice; likely 'International Relations' or 'International Studies' is intended. Reordering 'a student of IT' to 'a student of IT' or better 'a student in IT' makes the phrase natural. Suggestion: use 'a student in IT' or 'a student of IT' and confirm correct department name.

× I'm in my last year, the second semester so.

✓ I'm in my last year, in my second semester.

The placement and extra 'so' are unnecessary and make the sentence ungrammatical. Use 'in my second semester' to indicate current ongoing time in present tense. Remove 'so' or move it appropriately in conversation.

× I'm starting at in in Turkey.

✓ I started in Turkey.

Redundant words 'starting at in in' confuse tense and structure. The speaker refers to past action of beginning studies abroad, so simple past 'I started in Turkey' is appropriate. If meaning is 'I began my studies in Turkey,' use that full phrase.

× So I come here for just five years ago to start a chesty for university for a bachelor degree.

✓ I came here five years ago to start my university studies for a bachelor's degree.

The original mixes present 'come' with time expression 'five years ago' which requires past tense 'came'. 'chesty' is likely 'study' and article/possessive usage is incorrect: use 'my university studies' and 'a bachelor's degree' with correct possessive and article. Also remove unnecessary 'just' or place it before 'five years ago' for emphasis.

× So and I have been here for five years.

✓ I have been here for five years.

The extra 'So and' is filler and should be removed. The present perfect 'have been' is correct to express duration up to now; keep the sentence concise.

× So in the first year I did my foundation for Turkish language because and then I started straight to my department and I'm really now in my last year.

✓ In the first year I did a foundation course in Turkish, then I went straight into my department, and now I'm in my last year.

Use 'did a foundation course in Turkish' for natural phrasing; 'because and then' is incorrect conjunction use. 'Started straight to my department' should be 'went straight into my department.' Maintain tense consistency: past actions in simple past, current status in present 'now I'm in my last year.'

× It is in general the externalities really good, but the the location of my campus is not really nice because our campus is a bit far from the city center and the on the center is too far a bit.

✓ In general the facilities are really good, but the location of my campus is not very nice because it is a bit far from the city center.

Many wrong words: 'externalities' is incorrect—likely 'facilities.' Duplicate 'the the' and odd phrase 'the on the center is too far a bit' are ungrammatical. Use 'In general, the facilities are really good' and 'the campus is a bit far from the city center.' Articles should be used appropriately and redundant words removed.

× So if you are studying from this campus, you have to live in the areas that are really close to the campus.

✓ So if you study at this campus, you have to live in areas that are close to the campus.

Use 'study at' rather than 'studying from' for campus attendance. Remove 'the' before 'areas' and 'really' can be omitted for conciseness. Keep simple present for general truth.

× Yes, I would like to do a lot of chances and especially for the, for the younger generation, for the university students, because, yeah, when they got, when they come to university students, they don't have activities that they can do at the areas that are needed to the location.

✓ Yes, I would like to make many changes, especially for the younger generation and university students, because when they arrive at university they don't have activities to do in the nearby areas.

'Do a lot of chances' is incorrect; use 'make many changes.' Remove repeated 'for the.' 'When they got, when they come to university students' is ungrammatical; use 'when they arrive at university.' 'Activities that they can do at the areas that are needed to the location' is awkward—use 'activities to do in the nearby areas.' Maintain correct verb forms and prepositions.

× So I will build it for Sports Center and also, uh, green areas that they can sit and have a time.

✓ I would build a sports center and green areas where they can sit and relax.

'Build it for Sports Center' is incorrect object and article usage. Use conditional 'I would build' or 'I will build' depending on certainty. 'Have a time' is unnatural; use 'relax' or 'spend time.' Also use lowercase for common nouns and correct word order.

× So as I said, I am the last state of the university, so if I finish this one, I will apply for master degree in one of European countries.

✓ As I said, I am in the final stage of university, so if I finish this program, I will apply for a master's degree in one of the European countries.

'I am the last state' is incorrect; use 'in the final stage.' 'If I finish this one' is vague—use 'this program.' 'Apply for master degree' needs article and possessive: 'a master's degree.' Include 'the' before 'European countries' or better 'a European country' depending on meaning.

× So that's why I'm doing my arts exam for now.

✓ That's why I'm preparing for my entrance exams now.

'Doing my arts exam' is unclear; likely 'preparing for my entrance exams' or 'taking an exam.' Use 'preparing' for ongoing action. Keep present continuous for current activity.

× So if I get that admission, I will show to my master teacher identity side the exact country I'm going.

✓ If I get admission, I will inform my prospective master's supervisor of the exact country I will go to.

'Show to my master teacher identity side' is confused phrasing. Use 'inform my prospective master's supervisor' or 'my future master's advisor.' 'The exact country I'm going' needs completion: 'the exact country I will go to.' Maintain future tense consistency.

× It's been where I get the admission.

✓ It depends on where I get admission.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'It's been where I get the admission' should be 'It depends on where I get admission' to express that plans depend on which university offers admission. Use present simple 'depends' for general truth.