学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammatically. Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'I am studying') and combine short statements into one or two fluent sentences. Add one specific detail if needed (e.g., program year).

範例: I'm a student at Hamdadi University in Bangladesh, where I am studying for a BBA in English. I completed my HSC last year and am now in my first year of the undergraduate program.

建議: Provide a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons using correct collocations. Avoid unclear words like 'consultant' or 'decks' and use linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'so').

範例: I usually study at home because my room is very quiet and no one disturbs me, so I can concentrate better. I have my textbooks and notes organized there, which helps me study more efficiently.

建議: Answer directly and avoid filler words ('uh'). Use one or two sentences describing specific facilities and connect them with linking words like 'for example' or 'also'. Keep it natural and concise.

範例: Yes, it is. My university offers modern facilities, for example well-equipped computer labs and a large library, and reliable bus services for students, so the campus is very convenient for studying.

建議: Give a clear suggestion with correct vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words ('because', 'for example') and specific details about the change. Avoid incorrect words like 'out break dated' and 'strength can control it'.

範例: Yes. I would update the course project system because the current process is outdated; for example, introducing an online submission platform and modern collaboration tools would make it easier for students and instructors to manage projects.

建議: Structure your answer: start with a clear statement of your plan, then give one or two specific steps. Use correct tense and natural phrasing (e.g., 'I plan to complete my BA, then study for a master's abroad'). Avoid unnecessary words like 'kindly'.

範例: I plan to finish my BA in English at Hamdadi University and then pursue a master's degree abroad, ideally in the UK, to specialize further and gain international experience.

× Now I am study.

✓ Now I am studying.

The continuous present tense requires the verb in -ing form after am/is/are. 'Study' should be 'studying' to form 'am studying.' Use present continuous for ongoing actions.

× Now I am studying BBA in English.

✓ Now I am studying for a BBA in English.

Add the preposition 'for' to indicate studying toward a degree. This clarifies the relationship between the study and the degree program.

× I usually study at home because my room is always quiet and no one disturb me.

✓ I usually study at home because my room is always quiet and no one disturbs me.

The clause 'no one disturb me' needs third person singular verb agreement ('disturbs'). Also 'at home' is correct. Correct the verb to match the subject 'no one.'

× For example I can consultant better there and use my decks and books without inter interpretations.

✓ For example, I can concentrate better there and use my notes and books without interruptions.

'Consultant' is a noun; likely intended 'concentrate' (verb). 'Decks' is unclear; 'notes' fits study context. 'Inter interpretations' is incorrect; use 'interruptions.' Use verbs and nouns appropriately and choose vocabulary that matches meaning.

× Because my university provide better modern facilities, example modern uh computer labs, modern libraries, also modern uh teachers.

✓ Because my university provides better modern facilities, for example modern computer labs, modern libraries, and qualified teachers.

Subject 'my university' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides.' 'Example' should be 'for example' and list items separated by commas and 'and.' 'Teachers' described as 'modern' is odd; 'qualified' or 'experienced' is clearer.

× They also include uh better bus service.

✓ They also provide a better bus service.

Use 'provide' instead of 'include' for services, and include the article 'a' before 'better bus service.'

× So that is why it's good place to study.

✓ So that is why it's a good place to study.

Missing article 'a' before 'good place.' The phrase 'So that is why' is redundant; could be simplified, but adding 'a' corrects the grammar.

× I would update our class project system because the current 1 is out break dated.

✓ I would update our class project system because the current one is outdated.

Use 'one' not '1' in formal writing. 'Outbreak dated' is incorrect; the intended adjective is 'outdated.' Use simple adjective 'outdated' to describe something obsolete.

× For example I would introduce on online submissions platform and better software tools so strength can control it more easily and use modern resource.

✓ For example, I would introduce an online submission platform and better software tools so students can manage it more easily and use modern resources.

Use article 'an' before a vowel-sound word 'online.' 'Submissions' should be singular as part of 'submission platform.' 'Strength' is wrong word; likely 'students.' Use 'manage' instead of 'control' in this context and plural 'resources.'

× Kindly I studying BA in English so right now my plan is I completed my undergraduate in BA in English then I go abroad for my high study and I completed my master's degree in UH in abroad.

✓ I am currently studying for a BA in English, so my plan is to complete my undergraduate degree and then go abroad for further study and complete my master's degree abroad.

Multiple tense and structure errors: use present continuous 'am studying.' 'Completed' should be 'complete' (future action), and 'go' should be 'to go.' 'High study' is incorrect; use 'further study.' Remove redundant 'in UH in abroad' and use 'abroad.' Ensure infinitives ('to complete,' 'to go') after 'plan is.'

× It's right now it's my study plan.

✓ That is my current study plan.

Original has duplication 'It's right now it's.' Simplify to 'That is my current study plan.' This corrects redundancy and improves clarity.