学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms. Combine related ideas into one or two coherent sentences and avoid unnecessary words. Also correct institution name phrasing and tense (e.g., 'I am studying at Hamad University in Bangladesh' and 'I completed my HSC last year').

範例: I am a student. I study BA in English at Hamad University in Bangladesh, and I completed my HSC last year.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g., 'distracted', 'I focus on'). Avoid filler words like 'uh'.

範例: I usually study at home because it is quiet and I am less distracted. For example, I focus on reading and doing online research in the evenings when there is no background noise.

建議: Answer directly and avoid vague or disorganized lists. Use correct noun forms and possessives ('our university') and give one or two specific reasons connected with linking words. Remove fillers and be precise about what makes the place good.

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to study because our university provides modern facilities. For example, there is a high-quality computer lab and a well-stocked library, and the teachers are experienced.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence stating the change you would make, then explain specific reasons and details using linking words. Use correct adjectives ('outdated') and concise phrasing. Provide one or two concrete improvements you would add.

範例: If I could change something, I would renovate the library because it is small and outdated. I would expand it and add modern facilities such as more study rooms, new computers, and extended opening hours.

建議: Start with a clear statement of your current status and then outline your future plans in order. Use correct tenses and complete sentences, avoid repetition, and include specific destinations or fields if possible. Use linking words like 'then' or 'after that'.

範例: I am currently studying for a BA in English and expect to complete my undergraduate degree soon. After that, I plan to apply to study abroad to pursue a master's degree in English or a related field.

× I'm a student, I'm been studying in Hamad University, Bangladesh.

✓ I'm a student; I've been studying at Hamad University in Bangladesh.

The student used 'I'm been' which incorrectly combines present simple and present perfect continuous. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect for an action that started in the past and continues: 'I've been studying' or 'I've been studying at...'. Also use the preposition 'at' for institutions and add 'in' before the country. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses.

× I'm currently studying BA in English.

✓ I'm currently studying for a BA in English.

Omit 'studying BA' and use the verb phrase 'studying for a BA' to show the qualification being pursued. The preposition 'for' is required before the degree name.

× I completed my HSC last year.

✓ I completed my HSC last year.

This sentence is correct: past simple 'completed' is appropriate for an action finished in the past. No change needed.

× I usually study at home because it's quiet and I'm not distribute.

✓ I usually study at home because it's quiet and I am not distracted.

The student used 'I'm not distribute' which is ungrammatical. The correct adjective is 'distracted' (past participle used as adjective) meaning not having attention taken away. Also avoid contraction confusion: 'I am not distracted.'

× For example, I uh, concerned on reading or doing online research in the evening without background noise.

✓ For example, I focus on reading or doing online research in the evening without background noise.

The verb 'concerned' is incorrect here; you need a verb meaning 'to pay attention to' such as 'focus on'. Use 'focus on' followed by gerunds 'reading' and 'doing'. Also replace incorrect preposition 'on' after 'concerned' with the correct verb 'focus on'.

× Yeah, definitely. It's extremely good place, uh, because uh, our bus, our universities modern uh provide modern all facilities like uh example, high quality computer lab, library, better teachers.

✓ Yeah, definitely. It's an extremely good place because our university provides modern facilities, for example, a high-quality computer lab, a library, and better teachers.

Multiple article and agreement errors: 'extremely good place' needs the article 'an'. 'Our universities modern uh provide' is ungrammatical; use singular 'university' and verb agreement 'provides'. 'Provide modern all facilities' should be 'provides modern facilities'. Add articles before countable nouns: 'a high-quality computer lab' and 'a library'. Use commas and conjunctions for list clarity.

× Ah, when I get a chance to change anything in my university, I change the library because our library is small and backdated.

✓ Ah, if I had the chance to change anything at my university, I would change the library because our library is small and outdated.

This is a conditional sentence about a hypothetical situation. Use the second conditional: 'If I had the chance... I would change...'. Also use preposition 'at' for institutions and 'outdated' is the correct adjective instead of 'backdated'.

× So I change library to large and modern facilities.

✓ So I would make the library larger and give it modern facilities.

Maintain conditional mood with 'would'. Use 'make the library larger' (comparative), and 'give it modern facilities' to express intended improvements. 'Large' should be 'larger' when comparing, and 'facilities' requires 'modern' as adjective preceding it.

× Right now I'm starting at BA in English and I complete my undergraduate degree in English.

✓ Right now I'm starting a BA in English and I will complete my undergraduate degree in English.

Use 'starting a BA' not 'starting at BA'. For a future or planned completion, use 'will complete' or present continuous with future meaning; 'I complete' is incorrect tense here. 'Will complete' fits the intended future outcome.

× In near future plan apply for study abroad and I completed my master's degree in abroad and.

✓ In the near future I plan to apply to study abroad and complete my master's degree abroad.

Several errors: add the article 'the' before 'near future'. Use 'plan to apply' (infinitive) and 'apply to study abroad' (preposition 'to' after 'apply'). Use 'complete my master's degree abroad' for future intention; do not use past tense 'completed'. Remove extra 'and' at the end.