学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar and avoid filler sounds. Start with a clear topic sentence (I am a student) then add one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and remove unnecessary repetitions.

範例: I am a student. I study for a BA in English at Hamdard University in my hometown, which helps me improve my language skills.

建議: Give a direct answer then one or two specific details. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repeating the same words. Replace fillers (uh) with pauses if needed.

範例: I study at Hamdard University in Golzaria, Bangladesh. It is a pleasant town and the university offers good facilities, so I plan to complete my graduation there.

建議: This answer is clear and includes a relevant example. Improve accuracy and vocabulary (e.g. 'library' not 'Liberian'), subject-verb agreement, and reduce small errors. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

範例: Yes, it is a great place to study. The university provides modern facilities and helpful teachers, and the library and computer labs are open late, which makes it easier to prepare for exams.

建議: Answer directly and give specific, coherent suggestions using correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, therefore). Avoid filler words.

範例: I would like the university to expand the library and upgrade the computer labs. Because the library is small, increasing study space and improving services would help students concentrate and study more effectively.

建議: This response is unclear and contains many errors. Give a clear topic sentence about your plans, then one specific reason. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: In the future I plan to study abroad for a master's degree. I hope to go overseas because the universities there offer better facilities and more job opportunities after graduation.

× Currently I'm a studying UH, I'm studying at Hamdard University Bangladesh which is in uh, my hometown.

✓ Currently I'm studying at Hamdard University Bangladesh, which is in my hometown.

The original has an extra indefinite article 'a' before 'studying' and unnecessary filler 'UH'. Remove 'a' because 'studying' is part of the present continuous verb phrase 'I am studying'. Also combine clauses with a comma before the relative clause 'which is in my hometown' for clarity.

× I'm studying for BA in English because of UH, I focus on my English.

✓ I'm studying for a BA in English because I want to focus on my English.

Use the article 'a' before 'BA'. 'Because of UH' is unclear and likely filler—replace with a clear purpose clause 'because I want to focus on my English'. Also maintain consistent present tense and subject-verb clarity.

× I'm studying at Hamdad University, Bangladesh, which is located in my hometown, uh, in uh, Golzaria is very wonderful place, uh, and better facilities.

✓ I'm studying at Hamdard University in Bangladesh, which is located in my hometown Golzaria; it is a very wonderful place with good facilities.

Correct the university name to 'Hamdard'. Remove filler 'uh'. Use 'in Bangladesh' without a comma before the country in this context. The clause 'Golzaria is very wonderful place' needs the article 'a' and clearer structure; change to 'it is a very wonderful place with good facilities.' This fixes article errors and sentence structure.

× So I decide to uh, I complete my graduation this, this university.

✓ So I decided to complete my graduation at this university.

Use past or present perfect depending on intent; 'decide' should be 'decided' if referring to a concluded decision, and 'complete my graduation' is better with 'at this university'. Remove fillers and duplicate words. This corrects verb tense and sentence structure.

× It's an excellent place to study because they provide modern facilities and support teachers who explain things clearly, and the bus service is convenient for student.

✓ It's an excellent place to study because they provide modern facilities and supportive teachers who explain things clearly, and the bus service is convenient for students.

Change 'support teachers' to 'supportive teachers' (adjective use). 'Student' should be plural 'students' to match general reference. This corrects adjective/adverb choice and pluralization.

× For example, the Liberian computer labs are open late, which make it easier to prepare for exams.

✓ For example, the library and computer labs are open late, which makes it easier to prepare for exams.

'Liberian' is likely a mispronunciation of 'library' and 'computer labs' are separate; ensure correct nouns. The relative clause must agree: singular noun phrase 'the library and computer labs' can be treated as singular idea requiring 'makes' or rewrite to 'which make' with plural subject. Here use 'which makes' referring to 'being open late' as a single situation. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I would like to improve the computer lab and the library.

✓ I would like to improve the computer labs and the library.

If referring generally to the facility used by many students, 'computer labs' (plural) is more natural. Keep article 'the' before 'library' if speaking about their specific library. This clarifies count and reference.

× Our library is very small so uh I would make two large the study space and service which would make it easier for the student and read and concentrate.

✓ Our library is very small, so I would make the study spaces and services larger, which would make it easier for students to read and concentrate.

Original has incorrect word order ('make two large the study space'), wrong singular/plural forms, and missing infinitive 'to' before verbs. Reorder to 'make the study spaces and services larger' and change 'the student' to plural 'students' and add 'to read and concentrate'. This fixes sentence structure, pluralization, and infinitive usage.

× Right now I'm people also be wearing eyes so in future I go abroad for my high study and you know when I go abroad for high study is very like 2 hour better is like to better my study facilities also job opportunity so it's.

✓ Right now I'm finishing my studies, so in the future I want to go abroad for higher studies because studying abroad will improve my education and job opportunities.

The original is incoherent with many fragments and wrong verb forms ('I'm people also be wearing eyes'). Replace with a clear, grammatically correct sentence: 'I'm finishing my studies' (present continuous) and 'I want to go abroad for higher studies' (future intention). Use 'higher studies' or 'graduate studies' and explain reasons clearly. This addresses tense, sentence structure, and clarity.