学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: In English (Cambodia), you should focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. For example, use 'operates' instead of 'operate' to match the singular subject. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy.

範例: I'm currently working full-time as an electrical engineer at a power utility company. My main responsibility is to inspect and test electrical equipment before integration to ensure it operates within required standards.

建議: In English (Cambodia), pay attention to verb tenses and word choice. Use 'major' instead of 'merger' and correct verb forms like 'chose' instead of 'choose'. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and clarify your ideas.

範例: I graduated in 2017 from the Institute of Technologies of Cambodia, where I majored in electrical and electronic engineering. I chose this field because I have always been interested in electrical networks and wanted to develop my technical skills.

建議: In English (Cambodia), focus on sentence structure and vocabulary accuracy. Use 'my university' instead of 'my universities', 'well-equipped' instead of 'very equipped', and 'quiet' instead of 'quite'. Also, ensure subject-verb agreement, e.g., 'professors provide'.

範例: Yes, definitely. My university is an excellent place to study because it offers a comfortable environment and modern facilities. For example, there are well-equipped libraries and quiet study areas that help students focus. Additionally, the professors provide valuable guidance based on their experience, which really supports students.

建議: In English (Cambodia), use plural forms correctly, such as 'changes' and 'computers'. Also, improve sentence flow by using linking words like 'therefore' or 'so that'.

範例: Yes, I would like my university to make some changes to improve. For instance, the library currently has limited resources, so it would be helpful if they expanded the number of books and computers. This way, students could access more materials more easily, which would clearly support their learning.

建議: In English (Cambodia), pay attention to singular and plural forms, e.g., 'a master's degree' and 'electrical engineering'. Also, use correct verb tenses and prepositions, such as 'I have already applied' and 'to meet admission requirements'.

範例: In the future, I would like to pursue a master's degree in electrical engineering because it is closely related to my current job. I have already applied for several scholarships to study abroad and am now in the final stage of the application process. At the moment, I am preparing for the English proficiency test to meet admission requirements.

× My main responsibilities include inspecting and testing electrical equipment before it's integrated into the network to ensure that it's operate within the standard we require.

✓ My main responsibilities include inspecting and testing electrical equipment before it's integrated into the network to ensure that it operates within the standards we require.

The verb 'operate' should be in the third person singular present tense 'operates' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'standard' should be plural 'standards' to match the context of multiple requirements.

× Actually, I already graduated in 2017.

✓ Actually, I graduated in 2017.

The adverb 'already' is unnecessary with the simple past tense 'graduated' when specifying a past time like 'in 2017'. Using 'already' is more appropriate with present perfect tense.

× Before that I started at the Institute of Technologies of Cambodia, where my merger was electrical and electronic engineering.

✓ Before that, I started studying at the Institute of Technology of Cambodia, where my major was electrical and electronic engineering.

The phrase 'started at' is incorrect; it should be 'started studying at'. 'Institute of Technologies' should be singular 'Institute of Technology'. 'Merger' is incorrect; the correct word is 'major' to indicate field of study.

× I choose the field because I have already been interested in how electrical and electrical network and I wanted to develop my technical skills.

✓ I chose the field because I have always been interested in how electrical systems and networks work, and I wanted to develop my technical skills.

The verb 'choose' should be past tense 'chose' to match the past context. 'Already been interested' is awkward; 'have always been interested' is better. 'Electrical and electrical network' is repetitive and unclear; it should be 'electrical systems and networks'.

× Yes, definitely is my universities is an excellent place to study because it offers a comfortable environment and money youthful facilities.

✓ Yes, definitely my university is an excellent place to study because it offers a comfortable environment and many youthful facilities.

The phrase 'is my universities is' is incorrect and redundant; it should be 'my university is'. 'Money' is a typo for 'many' to describe countable 'facilities'.

× For example, there are very equipped libraries and quite a study area that helps students focus.

✓ For example, there are well-equipped libraries and quiet study areas that help students focus.

'Very equipped' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'well-equipped'. 'Quite a study area' should be 'quiet study areas' to describe a calm environment. Also, plural 'areas' matches 'libraries' and the plural subject.

× Additionally, the professor provide valuable guidance based on their experience with really support students.

✓ Additionally, the professors provide valuable guidance based on their experience and really support students.

'Professor' should be plural 'professors' to match 'their'. The verb 'provide' agrees with plural subject. The phrase 'with really support students' is incorrect; it should be 'and really support students'.

× Yes, I would like my university to make some change to improve.

✓ Yes, I would like my university to make some changes to improve.

'Change' should be plural 'changes' when referring to multiple improvements.

× For instance, the library currently has limited resources, so it would be helpful if they expanded the numbers of books and computer.

✓ For instance, the library currently has limited resources, so it would be helpful if they expanded the number of books and computers.

'Numbers of' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'number of' for countable nouns. 'Computer' should be plural 'computers' to match 'books'.

× At the moment, I am preparing for the English proficiency tied to meet admission requirement.

✓ At the moment, I am preparing for the English proficiency test to meet the admission requirements.

'Tied to meet' is incorrect; it should be 'test to meet'. 'Admission requirement' should be plural 'requirements' and preceded by the definite article 'the'.

× In the future, I would like to pursue a master degrees and electrical engineers because it closely related to my current job.

✓ In the future, I would like to pursue a master's degree in electrical engineering because it is closely related to my current job.

'Master degrees' should be singular possessive 'master's degree'. 'Electrical engineers' is incorrect; it should be 'electrical engineering' as a field of study. The verb 'is' is needed for 'it is closely related'.