学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法有误，"gain"应为"gaining"，且表达可以更自然流畅。建议使用现在进行时态描述当前状态，并简洁表达。

範例: Actually, I'm neither working nor studying at the moment. I'm taking a gap year to gain some practical experience on my own.

建議: 表达中"At the meantime"用词不当，应使用"Meanwhile"或"Besides"。另外，描述可以更具体，避免笼统。

範例: I study at Dalian Maritime University, located in the northeastern part of China. Besides, Dalian is a beautiful city known for its unique Japanese-style architecture.

建議: 语法错误较多，如"student"应为复数"students"，"is"应为"are"，"have"应为"has"。建议注意主谓一致，使用更准确的连接词。

範例: To be honest, Dalian is a great city for students to study. There are many squares where students can relax. Meanwhile, our school has numerous libraries.

建議: 回答不连贯，语法错误多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意语法和逻辑连贯性。

範例: Well, I think my school could have more sports facilities, like playgrounds, to encourage students to exercise and make friends.

建議: 表达不自然，"make my mind"应为"make up my mind"，"Has the meantime"用词错误，"very colorful"用法不当。建议使用更准确的短语和表达。

範例: I've made up my mind to become a qualified civil engineer. I plan to build reliable bridges and buildings. Meanwhile, I hope to develop diverse skills to solve various structural problems.

× Actually, I'm neither working nor studying at that moment.

✓ Actually, I'm neither working nor studying at the moment.

“at that moment”通常用于过去时态的叙述，这里描述的是现在的状态，应该用“at the moment”表示“此刻”。

× I'm taking a gap year and gain some practical experience on my own.

✓ I'm taking a gap year and gaining some practical experience on my own.

并列动词时，保持时态和形式一致，前面是现在进行时“taking”，后面也应使用现在进行时“gaining”。

× I study in the Dalian Maritime University, which is located in the northeastern part of China.

✓ I study at Dalian Maritime University, which is located in the northeastern part of China.

大学名称前通常不加定冠词“the”，且“study at”是固定搭配，表示在某学校学习。

× At the meantime, Dalian is a beautiful city with various kinds of Japanese buildings.

✓ In the meantime, Dalian is a beautiful city with various kinds of Japanese buildings.

短语应为“In the meantime”，表示“与此同时”，而非“At the meantime”。

× Dalian is a very great city for student to study.

✓ Dalian is a very great city for students to study.

“student”应使用复数形式“students”，因为泛指所有学生。

× There are various kinds of squares which is useful for students to relax.

✓ There are various kinds of squares which are useful for students to relax.

先行词“squares”为复数，关系代词“which”引导的定语从句谓语动词应使用复数“are”。

× In the meantime, our school have a lot of libraries.

✓ In the meantime, our school has a lot of libraries.

主语“school”为单数，谓语动词应使用单数“has”。

× Well, I think. I my school can use more places for students to do sports such as playgrounds where can make people more easier to get in touch with sports and make friends with others.

✓ Well, I think my school can use more places for students to do sports, such as playgrounds, which can make it easier for people to get in touch with sports and make friends with others.

句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。去掉多余的句号，补充主语“which”引导定语从句，调整“more easier”为“easier”，并使句子通顺。

× I'll make my mind to be a qualified civil engineer in the future.

✓ I've made up my mind to be a qualified civil engineer in the future.

表达“下定决心”应使用固定短语“make up one's mind”，且通常用现在完成时表示决定已做出。

× Has the meantime I think I can become very colorful and solve various kind of structure problems.

✓ In the meantime, I think I can become very capable and solve various kinds of structural problems.

“Has the meantime”错误，应为“In the meantime”；“colorful”用词不当，改为“capable”更符合语境；“various kind”应为“various kinds”；“structure problems”应为“structural problems”。