学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Javobingizda grammatik xatolarni tuzatish va gaplarni aniqroq, tabiiyroq qilish kerak. Masalan, 'I am currently a university student and I also work part-time.' kabi qisqa va aniq gaplar ishlatish yaxshiroq.

範例: I am currently a university student and I also work part-time to support myself.

建議: Javobda aniq va tabiiy gaplar ishlatish kerak. Masalan, 'I study at Jumbo National University in South Korea, which is ranked among the top 1000 universities worldwide according to QS World University Rankings.' kabi gaplar yaxshiroq.

範例: I study at Jumbo National University in South Korea, which is ranked among the top 1000 universities worldwide according to QS World University Rankings.

建議: Javobda grammatik xatolar va noaniqliklar bor. Gaplarni aniq va tabiiy qilish uchun, masalan, 'Yes, it is a good place to study because the professors are well qualified and dedicated to their work, which helps students find jobs in the future.' deb aytish mumkin.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the professors are well qualified and dedicated to their work, which helps students find jobs in the future.

建議: Javobni yanada tabiiy va aniq qilish uchun, masalan, 'I find the lesson schedule inconvenient because it changes frequently between mornings and afternoons, which is quite tiring. It would be better if the schedule was more consistent.' deb aytish mumkin.

範例: I find the lesson schedule inconvenient because it changes frequently between mornings and afternoons, which is quite tiring. It would be better if the schedule was more consistent.

建議: Javobni aniq va tabiiy qilish uchun, masalan, 'I have decided on my future career; after graduation, I want to become an IT programmer. Therefore, I do not plan to study for an MBA.' kabi gaplar ishlatish yaxshiroq.

範例: I have decided on my future career; after graduation, I want to become an IT programmer. Therefore, I do not plan to study for an MBA.

× However I'm working a part time job so hire a boss.

✓ However, I'm working a part-time job as a hired boss.

The original sentence uses 'so hire a boss' which is incorrect. The phrase should be 'as a hired boss' to correctly describe the role. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective.

× Umm studying and working.

✓ I am studying and working.

The original sentence is a fragment without a subject and verb. Adding 'I am' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× I'm starting at Jumbo National University in South Korea.

✓ I'm studying at Jumbo National University in South Korea.

The verb 'starting' is incorrect here; the student means to say they are currently studying. 'Starting' implies beginning, but the context suggests ongoing study.

× It is in the top 1000 globally by Kia's work ranking.

✓ It is in the top 1000 globally by QS World University Rankings.

The phrase 'Kia's work ranking' is incorrect and unclear. The correct term is 'QS World University Rankings', which is a recognized global university ranking system.

× because professors and the teachers are well qualified and they are must set off their work.

✓ because professors and teachers are well qualified and they must do their work well.

The phrase 'they are must set off their work' is grammatically incorrect. It should be 'they must do their work well' to express obligation and quality of work.

× So that's why students in the future will find a job.

✓ So that's why students will be able to find jobs in the future.

The original sentence is awkward. Adding 'be able to' clarifies ability, and 'jobs' should be plural to match 'students'.

× I think the lesson schedule is so bad because they are fluctuating over the week, sometimes daytime and sometimes afternoon.

✓ I think the lesson schedule is very bad because it fluctuates over the week, sometimes during the daytime and sometimes in the afternoon.

The subject 'lesson schedule' is singular, so the pronoun should be 'it' not 'they'. Also, 'fluctuating' should be 'fluctuates' to agree with singular subject.

× It would be better if you change.

✓ It would be better if you changed it.

In conditional sentences with 'would', the verb in the 'if' clause should be in the past tense ('changed'). Also, 'it' is needed to specify what should be changed.

× Well, I've already made a decision about my future career, so after graduating from university, I want to become a UH, IT programmer.

✓ Well, I've already made a decision about my future career, so after graduating from university, I want to become a UH IT programmer.

The comma after 'UH' is unnecessary and breaks the flow. Also, 'UH IT programmer' is likely a specific job title and should not have a comma.

× Uh, that's why I don't want to study MBA.

✓ Uh, that's why I don't want to study for an MBA.

'MBA' is a degree and should be preceded by an article and preposition: 'study for an MBA' is correct.