学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally good but a bit repetitive and slightly long. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "has helped me" and keep your answer concise within 4-5 sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I am currently a final year computer science student at XYZ University. Because of my curiosity about technology, I chose this field. At present, I am developing an AI-based learning app, which has significantly deepened my knowledge and practical skills.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Avoid filler words like "Ah" and provide specific details. Use linking words to add coherence and complete your thoughts clearly.

範例: I study at XYZ University, which is located in the city centre. I chose this university because it focuses on hands-on learning and research-oriented projects, which help students gain practical experience.

建議: Your answer has good points but contains some unclear phrases like "management district and discipline." Try to clarify your ideas and use linking words like "furthermore" or "in addition" to connect your points logically.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the faculty members have at least three years of experience in their fields. They can identify students' weak areas and help them improve. Furthermore, the management maintains discipline while supporting students during difficult times.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using linking words like "therefore" and avoiding repetition of "so." Also, try to be more concise.

範例: My college was built three decades ago, and during summer it gets quite warm and uncomfortable. Therefore, I feel the management should install air conditioning units to create a more comfortable environment. Apart from that, the facilities are adequate.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains filler words like "umm." Avoid trailing off and complete your sentences. Provide clear reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I plan to pursue my master's degree in artificial intelligence because technology drives our era. AI has transformed how humans interact and work, making this field very promising for the future.

× At the moment I'm working on an AI based learning app which has helped me which has significantly helped me to deepen my knowledge and practical skills.

✓ At the moment I'm working on an AI-based learning app which has significantly helped me to deepen my knowledge and practical skills.

The original sentence contains a repetition of 'which has helped me' that is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the repeated phrase improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, 'AI based' should be hyphenated as 'AI-based' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I study at XYZ University located at a location.

✓ I study at XYZ University located in a location.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'located' here. The correct preposition to indicate the place where something is situated is 'in'. Hence, 'located in a location' is correct.

× I chose this institution because it emphasizes on hands on learning and research oriented projects.

✓ I chose this institution because it emphasizes hands-on learning and research-oriented projects.

The verb 'emphasize' does not require the preposition 'on'. Also, 'hands on' and 'research oriented' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before nouns.

× Additionally, it has other all. Ah.

✓ Additionally, it has other facilities as well.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'facilities as well' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× Yes, it is a good place to study because the faculty members each have minimum of three years experience in their respective fields.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because each faculty member has a minimum of three years' experience in their respective field.

The subject 'each faculty member' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'minimum of three years experience' should be 'a minimum of three years' experience' with possessive apostrophe.

× They are able to identify the students weaker areas and help them to improve.

✓ They are able to identify the students' weaker areas and help them to improve.

The possessive form 'students'' is needed to show that the weaker areas belong to the students.

× Moreover, the management district and discipline but they help any student in times of difficulty.

✓ Moreover, the management maintains discipline but also helps any student in times of difficulty.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'maintains' and 'also helps' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Well, my college was built 3 decades ago, so during the summer months it could get quite warm and uncomfortable.

✓ Well, my college was built 3 decades ago, so during the summer months it can get quite warm and uncomfortable.

The use of 'could' suggests past possibility, but the sentence refers to a current recurring condition. 'Can' is appropriate to express present possibility.

× So I personally feel that the management could install air conditioning units which would create a more comfortable environment for the students.

✓ So I personally feel that the management should install air conditioning units which would create a more comfortable environment for the students.

'Could' implies possibility, but here the speaker is suggesting a recommendation. 'Should' is more appropriate to express advice or suggestion.

× Well, I'm planning to pursue my masters in artificial intelligence because we are in an era which is driven by technology.

✓ Well, I'm planning to pursue my master's in artificial intelligence because we are in an era driven by technology.

'Masters' should be possessive 'master's' when referring to the degree. Also, 'which is driven by technology' can be simplified to 'driven by technology' for better flow.

× AI has transformed the way humans interact and umm, work and therefore.

✓ AI has transformed the way humans interact and work; therefore,

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Removing 'umm' and completing the sentence with proper punctuation improves clarity.

× This field isn't.

✓ This field isn't going to lose its importance anytime soon.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence provides clarity and grammatical correctness.