学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency. Also, use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, such as 'communication studies' and 'social patterns'.

範例: I am a final-year university student majoring in Internet and New Media. I am particularly interested in communication studies because they reveal how media shapes public opinion and social patterns.

建議: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and adding linking words. Specify what you mean by 'diverse background people' for clarity.

範例: I study at Southwest Mingzhu University, a public university that has students from diverse backgrounds, which makes the campus very multicultural.

建議: Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, such as 'it offers' and 'it is quiet'.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it offers a large library where I usually go to learn English. The library is quiet, which helps me stay focused.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain the problem and its effect more smoothly.

範例: Yes, I think the library should improve its electricity supply because the power often goes out unexpectedly, which interrupts my studying when the lights turn off.

建議: Make your answer more confident and structured. Use linking words to separate short-term and long-term plans clearly.

範例: In the short term, I am focusing on writing my graduation essay. In the long term, I plan to study abroad to gain international experience.

× I'm I'm really into the communication study because it reveals a lot about social pattern like how media shape public opinion.

✓ I'm really into communication studies because it reveals a lot about social patterns like how media shape public opinion.

The phrase 'I'm I'm' contains a repetition error; it should be 'I'm'. Also, 'communication study' should be pluralized to 'communication studies' to refer to the field generally. 'Social pattern' should be plural 'social patterns' to match the context of multiple patterns.

× I am studying in Southwest Mingzhu University which is a public university and there are diverse background people.

✓ I am studying at Southwest Mingzhu University, which is a public university, and there are people from diverse backgrounds.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to attending a university; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'diverse background people' is awkward; it should be 'people from diverse backgrounds' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, it is a good place to study because it offer it offers a large library for students to study and I usually go there to learn English because there is quiet and allow me to stay focused and.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because it offers a large library for students, and I usually go there to learn English because it is quiet and allows me to stay focused.

The verb 'offer' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'offers'. Also, 'there is quiet' is incorrect; it should be 'it is quiet'. The verb 'allow' must agree with 'it', so it should be 'allows'. The sentence was also incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Yes, I think the library I often study should make some change because the electricity is often not very steady. Steady and maybe you are learning and the light is turn off.

✓ Yes, I think the library where I often study should make some changes because the electricity is often not very steady, and maybe when you are studying, the light turns off.

The phrase 'the library I often study' is missing 'where' to indicate location. 'Make some change' should be plural 'make some changes'. 'The light is turn off' is incorrect; it should be 'the light turns off' to match the present tense and subject-verb agreement. Also, 'maybe you are learning' is better as 'maybe when you are studying' for clarity.

× Maybe in the short term I I'm trying to write my essay for the graduation and for the long term I want to study abroad.

✓ Maybe in the short term, I am trying to write my essay for graduation, and in the long term, I want to study abroad.

The phrase 'I I'm' is a repetition error; it should be 'I am'. 'For the graduation' is incorrect; it should be 'for graduation' without 'the'. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.