学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сіздің жауабыңызда көп үзілістер мен қайталанулар бар, бұл сөйлеудің табиғи және тиімді болуына кедергі жасайды. Сұраққа нақты жауап беріп, қосымша ақпаратты логикалық түрде және қысқа сөйлемдермен беруге тырысыңыз.

範例: I am currently a student at Astana IT University, majoring in information security. I chose this field because I am interested in how programs and websites are created.

建議: Жауабыңызда сөздерді қайталау және үзілістер көп, сөйлемдер толық емес. Сұраққа нақты жауап беріп, университеттің орналасуы мен ерекшеліктерін қысқа әрі анық сипаттаңыз.

範例: I study at Astana IT University, which is located in the city center. It is very convenient for me, and the university has excellent facilities.

建議: Жауабыңызда қайталанулар және толық емес сөйлемдер бар. Сұраққа нақты жауап беріп, университеттің жақсы жақтарын нақты және түсінікті түрде сипаттаңыз.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because we have modern equipment and advanced technical resources that help us learn effectively.

建議: Жауабыңызда үзілістер мен қайталанулар көп, сөйлемдер толық емес. Өзгерістер туралы нақты және толық сөйлемдермен айтыңыз, мысалы, қандай жаңа мүмкіндіктер қажет екенін түсіндіріңіз.

範例: Yes, I would like my university to make some changes. For example, we need updated facilities and modern equipment to improve our learning experience.

建議: Жауабыңызда үзілістер мен толық емес сөйлемдер бар. Болашақ жоспарларыңызды нақты және толық сөйлемдермен айтыңыз, неге шетелде оқығыңыз келетінін түсіндіріңіз.

範例: Yes, I plan to pursue higher education and get my master's degree. I also want to study abroad to gain international experience and improve my skills.

× I managed to, I managed in uh information security.

✓ I am studying information security.

The student incorrectly used the past tense 'managed' instead of the present continuous tense to describe their current study. The correct form is 'I am studying' to indicate an ongoing action.

× I interested uh, in uh, Why uh, how uh created program or website?

✓ I am interested in why and how programs or websites are created.

The student omitted the verb 'am' and used incorrect word order. The correct sentence requires the verb 'am' for the present tense and proper word order to form a question or statement.

× I study at university, umm, located in the city, uh, center, uh, which is very com uh, very convenient for me.

✓ I study at the university located in the city center, which is very convenient for me.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'university' and 'city center' to specify the particular places. Omitting 'the' causes article errors.

× Umm, our universe, uh, our university, very, umm, uh, very, uh, very, very featured and have got more.

✓ Our university is very well-equipped and has many facilities.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct sentence structure requires a subject, verb, and complement. 'Featured' is incorrectly used; 'well-equipped' fits better.

× Yes, it is a good place for study because we have more, more traditional, more traditional equipment and other technique, technical supply for instance, we have.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because we have a lot of traditional equipment and other technical supplies, for instance.

The phrase 'more, more traditional' is redundant and incorrect. 'A lot of' is a better quantifier here. Also, 'technical supply' should be plural 'technical supplies'.

× Uh, yes, I would uh, like, uh, my, uh, my university, uh, some, uh, my university to make some, uh, changes.

✓ Yes, I would like my university to make some changes.

The sentence is repetitive and fragmented. The modal verb 'would like' is correctly used but should be followed by a clear object and verb phrase without repetition.

× I believe umm, we need, we needed to uh, uh, new facilities such as uh, update.

✓ I believe we need new facilities such as updates.

The student incorrectly mixed present 'need' and past 'needed'. The correct tense is present 'need' to express current necessity. Also, 'update' should be plural 'updates'.

× I, uh, I aspire to, uh, my, uh, pursue higher education, umm, for my, for my masters degree and uh, I, I'm too, umm, pursue higher education abroad, uh, because.

✓ I aspire to pursue higher education for my master's degree, and I also want to pursue higher education abroad because...

The verb 'aspire to' should be followed by the base form 'pursue'. The phrase 'I'm too pursue' is incorrect; 'I also want to pursue' is appropriate. 'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree'.