学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại như "umm" và "I umm I" làm cho câu trả lời không tự nhiên và kém hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I am currently a student, and I plan to focus more on my studies to prepare for my future career.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có nhiều từ ngữ không cần thiết như "Uh", "to be honest", "umm". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời thiếu liên kết và chi tiết cụ thể. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về nơi học.

範例: I currently study at a high school that has a well-stocked library, supportive teachers, and friendly classmates.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng ngữ pháp chưa chính xác (ví dụ: "they have excellent teacher" nên là "it has excellent teachers"). Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

範例: Yes, I believe it is a very good place to study because it has excellent teachers and modern facilities.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng chưa chính xác ("where I started" nên là "where I study"). Bạn nên sử dụng từ chính xác và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I would like my school to add more facilities for physical activities, such as a gym or sports area.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều từ ngữ thừa như "Huh", "Just for fun", "Hmm", "I don't know" làm giảm tính hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc hơn.

範例: I plan to continue studying music because I want to become a professional singer in the future.

× I am currently a student umm and I have planned in the future career that I believe that umm I umm I want to focus on the study more.

✓ I am currently a student, and I have planned my future career. I believe I want to focus more on my studies.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'have planned in the future career' which is awkward and ungrammatical. The phrase should be 'have planned my future career' to correctly express intention. Also, 'focus on the study more' should be 'focus more on my studies' for natural English usage.

× Uh, to be honest, I currently study at a high school because, umm, there is. Have a library and teacher and friends.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I currently study at a high school because there is a library, teachers, and friends.

The original sentence incorrectly splits 'there is' and the following nouns, causing a sentence fragment. 'There is' should be followed by a singular noun or 'there are' for plural nouns. Here, 'library' is singular, but 'teacher and friends' are plural, so it should be 'there is a library, teachers, and friends.'

× Yes, I believe it is a very good place to study because the school they have excellent teacher and modern facilities.

✓ Yes, I believe it is a very good place to study because the school has excellent teachers and modern facilities.

The phrase 'excellent teacher' should be plural 'excellent teachers' to agree with the plural subject 'school' which implies multiple teachers. Also, 'the school they have' is incorrect; it should be 'the school has.'

× Yes, I would like the place where I started to have more facilities for physical activity, such as a gym or sports area.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to have more facilities for physical activity, such as a gym or sports area.

The word 'started' is past tense and incorrect here. The student is referring to the current place of study, so the present tense 'study' should be used.

× I've learned to continue studying in music because I want to become a professional singer.

✓ I plan to continue studying music because I want to become a professional singer.

'I've learned to continue studying' is incorrect and awkward. The student likely means to express future intention, so 'I plan to continue studying music' is appropriate.