学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Следует избегать излишней информации и использовать простые, но точные выражения.

範例: I am currently a student in the 10th grade because I am 16 years old.

建議: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и уточните детали.

範例: I study at a large school in Moscow, which has many facilities for learning and sports activities.

建議: Используйте более точные выражения и правильную грамматику. Добавьте связующие слова для плавности речи.

範例: Absolutely, because our large and modern school offers many opportunities to learn new things, so I really enjoy studying there.

建議: Ответ можно сделать более естественным и связным, используя подходящие связующие слова и избегая повторов.

範例: I wouldn't want to make any changes because we already have many facilities and excellent teachers, which is all I need at my school.

建議: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные глаголы и более ясную структуру.

範例: I want to attend my dream university to gain new knowledge, meet new friends, and graduate with good grades.

× Honestly, I just studied school at 10th grade. Because I'm only 16 years old.

✓ Honestly, I just finished studying at 10th grade because I'm only 16 years old.

The phrase 'studied school at 10th grade' is incorrect; 'finished studying at 10th grade' is more appropriate to indicate completion. Also, 'Because' should not start a sentence here; it is better connected to the previous sentence to avoid sentence fragments.

× To be honest, I study at school in Moscow so my school is too big and have too much facilities and possibilities to learning and do sports.

✓ To be honest, I study at a school in Moscow, so my school is very big and has many facilities and opportunities for learning and doing sports.

The preposition 'at school' is correct but 'my school is too big' should be 'very big' for better meaning. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'school'. 'Too much facilities' is incorrect; 'many facilities' is correct because 'facilities' is countable. 'Possibilities to learning and do sports' should be 'opportunities for learning and doing sports' to use correct prepositions and gerunds.

× my school is too big and have too much facilities and possibilities to learning and do sports.

✓ my school is very big and has many facilities and opportunities for learning and doing sports.

The subject 'school' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'too much facilities' is incorrect because 'facilities' is countable; 'many facilities' is correct.

× Absolutely, because of our large and modern school we have too much possibilities to learn and having new knowledge so I enjoy to learn in at my school.

✓ Absolutely, because of our large and modern school, we have many opportunities to learn and gain new knowledge, so I enjoy learning at my school.

'Too much possibilities' is incorrect; 'many opportunities' is correct for countable nouns. 'Possibilities to learn and having new knowledge' is awkward; 'opportunities to learn and gain new knowledge' is better. 'Enjoy to learn in at my school' is incorrect; 'enjoy learning at my school' is correct.

× I enjoy to learn in at my school.

✓ I enjoy learning at my school.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('learning'), not an infinitive ('to learn'). Also, 'in at' is redundant; only 'at' is needed.

× As for me, not because we already have many facilities, really good teachers and that is all that I want in my school.

✓ As for me, no, because we already have many facilities, really good teachers, and that is all I want in my school.

The phrase 'As for me, not because' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'As for me, no, because...' to clearly express disagreement. Also, 'that is all that I want' can be simplified to 'that is all I want'.

× So I don't think that I would make any changes.

✓ So I don't think I would make any changes.

The phrase 'that I would make' is grammatically correct but can be simplified by omitting 'that' for smoother flow.

× Honestly, I want to answer my dream university where I will get new knowledge for me, meet new friends and then I want to graduate with good marks.

✓ Honestly, I want to attend my dream university where I will gain new knowledge, meet new friends, and then graduate with good marks.

The verb 'answer' is incorrect here; 'attend' is the correct verb for going to a university. 'Get new knowledge for me' is awkward; 'gain new knowledge' is better. Also, 'then I want to graduate' can be simplified to 'then graduate' for smoother flow.