学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法有误，如"I'm currently major in"应为"I'm currently majoring in"。内容较丰富，但句子结构稍显复杂，建议简化表达，避免重复。

範例: I'm currently majoring in accounting and economics. Last year, I completed an auditing internship. After graduation, I hope to become a costing accountant.

建議: 回答内容具体且连贯，但有语法错误，如"an university"应为"a university"，"like subways"表达不够自然，建议改为"such as the subway"。

範例: I study at a university located in the city center, which is very convenient for me. The campus has excellent facilities, including modern libraries and comfortable study areas that help me focus better. Additionally, being close to public transport, such as the subway, makes commuting easy.

建議: 回答内容重复了上一题的内容，且有语法错误，如"sub subway"和"it makes it makes it"。建议避免重复，简洁表达。

範例: Yes, it's a great place to study because of its excellent facilities like modern libraries and comfortable study areas. Also, its proximity to public transport makes commuting very convenient.

建議: 表达不够清晰，有语法和用词错误，如"They said if there's one thing at the improve"应为"If there's one thing to improve"。建议简化句子，明确表达观点。

範例: If there's one thing to improve, it would be the protection of some ancient buildings on campus. These old brick buildings hold important historical value, but some are currently damaged, which is a real shame.

建議: 回答内容具体且连贯，表达清晰。可以注意避免口语化词汇如"way more"，改用更正式的表达。

範例: I plan to pursue a master's degree in business analysis. This will provide more career advancement opportunities. Moreover, employers nowadays prefer candidates with professional data analysis skills, so this seems like a wise choice for my future.

× I'm currently major in accounting and majoring in economics.

✓ I'm currently majoring in accounting and economics.

动词 'major' 在这里需要使用现在进行时 'majoring' 来表示正在进行的动作。原句中 'I'm currently major' 是错误的表达，应改为 'I'm currently majoring'。

× I'm studying at an university located in the city center, which is very convenient for me.

✓ I'm studying at a university located in the city center, which is very convenient for me.

单词 'university' 以辅音音素开头，前面应使用不定冠词 'a' 而非 'an'。原句中使用了错误的冠词 'an'。

× Additionally, being close to the public transport makes it easy to commute every day like subways.

✓ Additionally, being close to public transport makes it easy to commute every day by subway.

'public transport' 前不需要加定冠词 'the'，且 'like subways' 应改为 'by subway' 来表达乘坐地铁的方式。

× Additionally, the university is close to the public transport such as sub subway and it makes it makes it easy to commute every day.

✓ Additionally, the university is close to public transport such as the subway, and it makes it easy to commute every day.

'public transport' 前不需要加定冠词 'the'，'sub subway' 是错误表达，应为 'the subway'。另外，句中重复了 'it makes it'，应删除多余部分。

× They said if there's one thing at the improve, it's the protection of some ancient buildings in the campus, like the the those old buildings made with traditional bricks.

✓ If there's one thing to improve, it's the protection of some ancient buildings on the campus, like those old buildings made with traditional bricks.

句中 'They said' 不合上下文，且 'at the improve' 应为 'to improve'。'in the campus' 应改为 'on the campus'。'the the those' 是重复错误，应只用 'those'。

× They hold such precious historical memories in these universities, development history.

✓ They hold such precious historical memories of the university's development history.

'these universities' 与上下文不符，应为单数 'the university'。'development history' 需要用所有格表达，改为 'the university's development history'。

× But right now some of them are damaged.

✓ But right now some of them are damaged.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× I've got a plan to pursue a master's degree in business analysis.

✓ I have a plan to pursue a master's degree in business analysis.

'I've got' 是口语表达，书面语中更正式的表达是 'I have'。此处非严格错误，可视为风格调整。

× For one thing, it will open up way more career advancement opportunities.

✓ For one thing, it will open up many more career advancement opportunities.

'way more' 是口语表达，正式写作中应使用 'many more' 来修饰可数名词 'opportunities'。

× Besides, these days employers basically prefer people who have professional data analysis skills, so it feels like a smart move for my future.

✓ Besides, these days employers basically prefer people who have professional data analysis skills, so I feel it's a smart move for my future.

'it feels like' 用于表达感觉，主语应为人称代词 'I'，而非 'it'。