学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better fluency. For example, instead of repeating 'I am' twice, you can combine ideas smoothly. Also, use articles correctly, e.g., 'a public hospital'.

範例: Currently, I am working as a nurse in a public hospital in Delhi, but I look forward to returning to my studies in a few years.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks coherence and has some grammatical errors. Try to organise your answer with linking words and avoid repetition. Also, clarify the meaning of 'degree course in one of the Regional Hospital' for better clarity.

範例: I studied in my hometown; I completed my high school at a nearby school and then pursued a four-year degree course at a regional hospital in my state.

建議: Your answer is relevant but somewhat repetitive and lacks smooth linking. Try to use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas and avoid repeating words like 'good school'. Also, clarify 'projects that happens sometimes' for better understanding.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study; however, sometimes there are disruptions due to communal disputes and occasional projects, which pose challenges.

建議: Your answer is meaningful but can be more concise and better structured. Use linking words like 'although' and avoid repeating phrases like 'development of the development'. Also, try to be more specific about the changes you suggest.

範例: Although the educational system is quite good, it could improve by embracing recent advancements in science and technology.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting prepositions and sentence flow. Use linking words like 'therefore' to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

範例: I have a keen interest in pursuing master's studies in public health or mental health; therefore, I hope to start soon.

× I work in one of the public hospital in Delhi.

✓ I work in one of the public hospitals in Delhi.

The noun 'hospital' should be plural 'hospitals' because it refers to one among multiple hospitals. Using singular here is incorrect.

× I did my high schooling in a school nearby my house, and my college was also there in my own state, where I pursued my degree course for four years in one of the Regional Hospital.

✓ I did my high schooling in a school near my house, and my college was also there in my own state, where I pursued my degree course for four years in one of the Regional Hospitals.

The phrase 'one of the Regional Hospital' requires 'Hospitals' in plural because it refers to one among multiple hospitals. Also, 'nearby my house' should be 'near my house' for correct preposition usage.

× I did my high schooling in a school nearby my house, and my college was also there in my own state, where I pursued my degree course for four years in one of the Regional Hospital.

✓ I did my high schooling in a school near my house, and my college was also there in my own state, where I pursued my degree course for four years in one of the Regional Hospitals.

The preposition 'nearby' is an adjective or adverb and should not be used before 'my house'. The correct preposition is 'near' to indicate proximity.

× But there could be some disruptions because of the communal disputes and projects that happens sometimes those are the only disruptions and difficulties that or the challenges that was there.

✓ But there could be some disruptions because of the communal disputes and projects that happen sometimes; those are the only disruptions and difficulties or the challenges that were there.

The verb 'happens' should be plural 'happen' to agree with the plural subject 'disputes and projects'. Also, 'was' should be 'were' to agree with plural 'challenges'.

× projects that happens sometimes

✓ projects that happen sometimes

The verb must agree with the plural subject 'projects', so 'happens' should be 'happen'.

× challenges that was there

✓ challenges that were there

The plural noun 'challenges' requires the plural verb 'were' instead of 'was'.

× those are the only disruptions and difficulties that or the challenges that was there.

✓ those are the only disruptions and difficulties or the challenges that were there.

The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly placed before 'or'. It should be either 'and' or 'or' to connect the phrases properly.

× I have a very keen interest on pursuing public health or a mental health studies, so I do look forward to going through my masters studies in these two fields.

✓ I have a very keen interest in pursuing public health or mental health studies, so I do look forward to going through my master's studies in these two fields.

The correct preposition with 'interest' is 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'a mental health studies' is incorrect; it should be 'mental health studies' without 'a'. 'Masters studies' should be 'master's studies' to indicate possession.