学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. For example, use 'accounts' instead of 'account' and 'fields' instead of 'field'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining sentences smoothly.

範例: I am a student and have recently completed my 8th semester in a Bachelor's degree in Business Administration. I enjoy studying management, accounts, and finance, and I hope to work in these related fields in the future.

建議: Your answer is informative but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for coherence. For example, use 'besides' instead of 'beside' and avoid awkward phrasing like 'have get'.

範例: I study at Kathmandu University School of Management, located in Palkumari, Lalitpur. Besides providing theoretical knowledge, the university also offers practical training to help students better understand real-world practices.

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm but needs grammatical corrections and smoother linking. For example, use 'professors are' instead of 'professor there are', and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas.

範例: Definitely, it's a wonderful place to study. The courses are regularly updated according to society's needs, and the professors are outstanding. They are not only passionate about teaching but also stay updated on current trends and developments.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, use plural form 'professors' consistently and add linking words for better flow. Also, replace 'prior or in advance' with just 'in advance' for simplicity.

範例: One thing I would like to see improved is how class cancellations are handled. Sometimes professors cancel at the last minute when most of us are already in the classroom, which makes us feel our time is not valued. Therefore, it would be better if professors could inform us in advance if they are unable to attend.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words. For example, use 'fields' instead of 'field' and 'related areas' instead of 'relating areas'. Also, use 'and then' to connect your plans.

範例: I have a keen interest in subjects like accounting and finance, so in the future I hope to get my master's degree in one of these fields. And then, I would like to build a career in related areas, perhaps in banking or financial management.

× I enjoy learning about management, account and finance.

✓ I enjoy learning about management, accounting, and finance.

The word 'account' should be 'accounting' to correctly refer to the field of study. Also, when listing items, commas should separate them, and 'accounting' is the correct noun form here.

× So I would hope to work in these related field in the future.

✓ So I would hope to work in these related fields in the future.

The word 'field' should be plural 'fields' because 'these' refers to multiple areas (management, accounting, finance).

× I study at Kathmandu University School of Management which is located at Palkumari, Lalitpur.

✓ I study at Kathmandu University School of Management which is located in Palkumari, Lalitpur.

The correct preposition for locations like neighborhoods or areas is 'in' rather than 'at'.

× Beside providing theoretical knowledge, the university also provides practical knowledge so as to help the students to have get better understanding of the real world practices.

✓ Besides providing theoretical knowledge, the university also provides practical knowledge to help the students get a better understanding of real-world practices.

'Beside' should be 'Besides' to mean 'in addition to'. Also, 'to have get' is incorrect; it should be 'get'. The phrase 'a better understanding' requires the article 'a'. 'Real world' should be hyphenated as 'real-world' when used as an adjective.

× The courses are regularly updated as per the needs of the society and the professor there are outstanding.

✓ The courses are regularly updated as per the needs of society and the professors there are outstanding.

'The society' should be 'society' without 'the' because it refers to society in general. 'Professor' should be plural 'professors' to agree with 'are'.

× They're not only just passionate about teaching and are uh, updated about the trends and current development similarly.

✓ They're not only passionate about teaching but are also updated about the trends and current developments.

The phrase 'not only just' is redundant; 'not only' suffices. The conjunction 'and' should be replaced with 'but also' to correctly pair with 'not only'. 'Development' should be plural 'developments' to match 'trends'. The word 'similarly' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× Sometimes professor cancels at last minute when most of us are already in the classroom.

✓ Sometimes professors cancel at the last minute when most of us are already in the classroom.

'Professor' should be plural 'professors' to agree with 'sometimes' indicating multiple occurrences. 'At last minute' should be 'at the last minute' with the definite article.

× So it would be better if the professors can inform prior or in advance if they are unable to attend.

✓ So it would be better if the professors could inform us prior or in advance if they are unable to attend.

In conditional sentences expressing hypothetical situations, 'could' is preferred over 'can'. Also, 'inform' should be followed by the object 'us' to clarify who is being informed.

× I have a keen interest in subjects like accounting and finance, so in the future I hope I can get my masters degree in one of these field.

✓ I have a keen interest in subjects like accounting and finance, so in the future I hope I can get my master's degree in one of these fields.

'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. 'Field' should be plural 'fields' to agree with 'these'.

× After that I would want to build a career in one of the relating areas, perhaps in banking or finance management.

✓ After that I would want to build a career in one of the related areas, perhaps in banking or financial management.

'Relating areas' should be 'related areas' as 'related' is the correct adjective form. 'Finance management' should be 'financial management' to correctly describe the field.