学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が少し冗長で、繰り返しが見られます。より自然で効果的な表現にするために、重複を避け、簡潔に答えましょう。例えば、"I am currently a high school student and a member of the brass band club."のようにまとめると良いです。

範例: I am currently a high school student and a member of the brass band club.

建議: 回答が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや意味の通じにくい部分があります。学校名の発音や表現を正確にし、理由を明確に述べることが重要です。例えば、"I study at Alcohol High School, which is one of the top-ranked schools, so I always try my best."のように言い換えましょう。

範例: I study at Alcohol High School, which is one of the top-ranked schools, so I always try my best.

建議: 回答に誤った学校名や不自然な表現が含まれています。また、理由が不明瞭で文が途中で終わっているように感じられます。具体的で明確な理由を述べ、文を完結させましょう。例えば、"Yes, it is. I think Holy Cow High School is a beautiful place to study because it has diverse students with different perspectives, which helps me learn a lot."のように。

範例: Yes, it is. I think Holy Cow High School is a beautiful place to study because it has diverse students with different perspectives, which helps me learn a lot.

建議: 質問に対して直接的な回答がなく、内容が曖昧です。質問に対して明確に答え、その後に将来の計画を述べると良いでしょう。例えば、"I don't have any specific changes in mind for my school, but in the future, I want to attend a university to study a specialized field."のように。

範例: I don't have any specific changes in mind for my school, but in the future, I want to attend a university to study a specialized field.

建議: 回答が不完全で文法的に不自然です。将来の計画を明確に述べ、理由や目的を具体的に説明しましょう。例えば、"I'm not sure about all my future plans yet, but I dream of traveling the world. Therefore, I want to study English and global studies at university to prepare for that."のように。

範例: I'm not sure about all my future plans yet, but I dream of traveling the world. Therefore, I want to study English and global studies at university to prepare for that.

× I am a high school student now and I I am studying at high school and also a member of brass band club.

✓ I am a high school student now, studying at high school, and I am also a member of the brass band club.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I am') and lacks proper conjunctions and articles, causing sentence structure issues. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I study at alcohol high school and this school is the one of the highest grade high school so I I always do my best This is because.

✓ I study at Alcohol High School, and this school is one of the highest-grade high schools, so I always do my best because of that.

The phrase 'the one of the highest grade high school' is incorrect; 'one of the highest-grade high schools' is correct. Also, 'Alcohol High School' should be capitalized as a proper noun. The sentence was fragmented and needed punctuation for clarity.

× Yes, it is. I think holy cow high school is very beautiful place to study for me. This is because there are many kinds of students who have a different point of view and many, many hard.

✓ Yes, it is. I think Holy Cow High School is a very beautiful place to study for me because there are many kinds of students who have different points of view and work very hard.

Proper nouns like 'Holy Cow High School' need capitalization. 'Very beautiful place' requires the article 'a'. 'A different point of view' should be pluralized to 'different points of view' to match 'many kinds of students'. 'Many, many hard' is incomplete and corrected to 'work very hard' for clarity.

× MMM maybe I don't know, but in the future I want to go to some university or college and this is because I want to learn about more specialized.

✓ Hmm, maybe I don't know, but in the future, I want to go to a university or college because I want to learn more specialized subjects.

The phrase 'learn about more specialized' is incomplete; it should specify 'subjects' or 'fields'. Also, 'some university or college' is better as 'a university or college'. The modal verb 'want to' is used correctly but the sentence needed clarification.

× I'm not sure in the future plans, but I have a dream to visit somewhere in this world, so I want to run about English and global studies and so I want to go to university and then.

✓ I'm not sure about my future plans, but I have a dream to visit places around the world. I want to study English and global studies, and then I want to go to university.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incomplete ideas. 'Run about English and global studies' is incorrect; it should be 'study English and global studies'. The sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity.