学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and does not directly respond to the question. Try to give a simple and direct answer about your current status (working or studying) and add a brief detail about your education or work. Use simple, clear sentences and avoid unrelated information.

範例: I am currently a student. I have completed my matriculation from Katrabad and intermediate from Punjab Group of Colleges. I am now pursuing my graduation at Nidhi Roman University in Medina Town.

建議: Your answer is confusing and does not address the question. Please provide a clear and direct answer stating the name of your institution and possibly the course or department you study in. Keep your sentences simple and relevant.

範例: I study at Nidhi Roman University in Medina Town. I am enrolled in the Computer Science department and currently attending my second year.

建議: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes and be more specific about the facilities.

範例: Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because the teachers and staff are well trained and always willing to help students. Moreover, the university has a spacious library with a wide range of books and resources.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect your points and correct grammar mistakes. Be specific about the changes you want and explain why they are important.

範例: Yes, I would like the university to make some changes to improve the study environment. For example, providing modern computers and faster Wi-Fi would make studying more efficient. Additionally, creating more quiet zones would help students concentrate better.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words for better flow. Also, try to be more specific about the field you want to study and how studying overseas will benefit you.

範例: After finishing my graduation, I plan to pursue a higher degree in my field to gain practical experience and skills. Moreover, studying overseas will broaden my perspective and help me learn about different cultures.

× I want to dance in Chandrakanta. Pic is my graduation in tribute to Nidhi Roman University, Medina town along with intermediates from Punjab group of colleges and having matriculation from the consistent Katrabad. Recently I'll have certificate in uncertainty commutation.

✓ I want to study at Chandrakanta. I graduated from Nidhi Roman University, Medina Town, along with intermediate studies from Punjab Group of Colleges and matriculation from Katrabad. Recently, I received a certificate in uncertainty computation.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors and unclear phrases. 'I want to dance in Chandrakanta' is likely a misstatement; it should be 'I want to study at Chandrakanta.' The phrase 'Pic is my graduation in tribute to...' is unclear and incorrectly structured. The sentence needs to be broken down into clear, grammatically correct sentences to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'uncertainty commutation' seems incorrect and is corrected to 'uncertainty computation' assuming the intended meaning.

× Recently I'll have certificate in uncertainty commutation.

✓ Recently, I received a certificate in uncertainty computation.

The phrase 'I'll have certificate' incorrectly uses future tense 'will have' for a past event. Since the certificate was obtained recently, the past tense 'received' is appropriate.

× I forgot he was cleaning the water between the 2005 is the last day he was with me.

✓ I forgot; he was cleaning the water. The year 2005 was the last day he was with me.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper sentence structure. It combines unrelated ideas without clear connectors. Breaking it into two sentences clarifies the meaning. Also, 'between the 2005' is incorrect; 'the year 2005' is correct.

× He was created in CJS techniques with the next university.

✓ He was trained in CJS techniques at the next university.

The phrase 'He was created in CJS techniques' is incorrect; 'created' is not appropriate here. The correct verb is 'trained.' Also, 'with the next university' is unclear; 'at the next university' is more appropriate.

× Second focus is on my class.

✓ My second focus is on my class.

The original sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'My' clarifies the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× Yes, it's a good, definitely it's a good place to study because all the teachers and the staff are so well trained and always willing to help each other, especially helping hand for students.

✓ Yes, it's definitely a good place to study because all the teachers and staff are well trained and always willing to help each other, especially offering a helping hand to students.

The phrase 'it's a good, definitely it's a good place' is redundant and awkward. 'Definitely a good place' is more natural. Also, 'helping hand for students' should be 'offering a helping hand to students' for correct preposition use and clarity.

× And also the data has a spacious library.

✓ Also, the campus has a spacious library.

'The data has a spacious library' is incorrect because 'data' cannot have a library. Likely, 'campus' or 'institution' was intended. Also, starting with 'And also' is redundant; 'Also' suffices.

× WHO makes several changes to study to improve the study environment.

✓ We should make several changes to improve the study environment.

'WHO' is incorrect here; likely 'we' was intended. Also, 'to study to improve the study environment' is awkward; 'to improve the study environment' is clearer.

× For example, having molecular resources such as modern computers and high Wi-Fi speed would make the study more efficient and convenient.

✓ For example, having modern resources such as modern computers and high-speed Wi-Fi would make studying more efficient and convenient.

'Molecular resources' is incorrect; likely 'modern resources' was intended. Also, 'high Wi-Fi speed' should be 'high-speed Wi-Fi.' 'Make the study' is better as 'make studying' for natural phrasing.

× Additionally, more quiet, adding more quiet zone areas for students to make.

✓ Additionally, adding more quiet zones for students would help.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'More quiet' is unclear; 'quiet zones' is better. The phrase 'for students to make' is incomplete and should be omitted or completed properly.

× After finishing my graduation, my main aim is to pursue a degree in higher studies in order to get experience and skills and practical skills in my respective field and also studying overseas will help me broaden my vision and mind.

✓ After finishing my graduation, my main aim is to pursue higher studies to gain experience and practical skills in my field. Also, studying overseas will help me broaden my vision and mind.

The original sentence is too long and repetitive ('experience and skills and practical skills'). Breaking it into two sentences improves clarity. 'Degree in higher studies' is awkward; 'pursue higher studies' is better.