学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は内容が豊富ですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「Their name is in UK」は意味が不明瞭で、より明確に表現する必要があります。また、冗長な部分を避け、簡潔に答えることが望ましいです。

範例: I work for a well-known Japanese newspaper that has offices in the UK. I usually cover stories about science and technological advancements, which I find very exciting because I learn a lot.

建議: 場所の説明に混乱があり、「California」と言っていますが、文脈からすると近所のカフェのことを指しているようです。正確な情報を伝えるために、場所の説明を明確にし、文法的な誤りを修正しましょう。

範例: I usually study at a café near my home, which is about a five-minute walk away. I find it important because I can concentrate without being disturbed.

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法や語彙の誤用があります。例えば、「some comfortable musics」や「some more chatting boys surrounding me」は不自然です。より自然で明確な表現を心がけ、理由を具体的に述べましょう。

範例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because the background music is relaxing, and even though there are some people chatting nearby, it helps me focus better. Studying there has become an important part of my weekend routine.

建議: 意図は伝わりますが、「approve with the smoking strictly」などの表現は不自然です。より適切な表現を使い、理由を簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I would like the café to enforce a strict no-smoking policy because the smell of cigarettes bothers me.

建議: 回答が不明瞭で、繰り返しの「uh」が多く、文法や語彙の誤りも目立ちます。具体的な大学名や学びたい分野を明確にし、流暢に話す練習をしましょう。

範例: I plan to study at a university in the UK that is well-known for its programs in sustainable development. I want to gain in-depth knowledge in this field to contribute to environmental protection.

× Ah, I'm working in a Japanese newspaper company and it's very well known company all over the world now.

✓ Ah, I'm working in a Japanese newspaper company and it's a very well-known company all over the world now.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very well-known company'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Also, 'well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× Their name is in UK.

✓ Its name is in the UK.

The pronoun 'Their' is incorrect because 'company' is singular, so 'Its' should be used. Also, 'UK' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' as it is a country name used with 'the'.

× I'm always studying in a cafeteria near from my home.

✓ I'm always studying in a cafeteria near my home.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary after 'near'. The correct phrase is 'near my home' without 'from'.

× It takes about 5 minutes or so and spending that time in California is very important for me because I can focus on the studying without interruption by others.

✓ It takes about 5 minutes or so and spending that time in the cafeteria is very important for me because I can focus on studying without interruption by others.

The original sentence incorrectly mentions 'California' instead of 'cafeteria', which is likely a mistake. Also, 'the studying' should be 'studying' without 'the' as it is a general activity. 'Interruption by others' is acceptable but could be improved to 'interruptions from others' for naturalness.

× Yes, I think so, as some comfortable musics and some more chatting boys surrounding me make some much more focused on my studying and it's a very important daily routine for me, especially in our weekends.

✓ Yes, I think so, as some comfortable music and some chatting boys surrounding me make me much more focused on my studying and it's a very important daily routine for me, especially on weekends.

'Musics' is incorrect; 'music' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. 'Some more chatting boys' is awkward; 'some chatting boys' suffices. 'Make some much more focused' is incorrect; it should be 'make me much more focused'. Also, 'in our weekends' should be 'on weekends'.

× Ah yes Sir, I want the cafe to approve with the smoking strictly because the smell of the cigarette always makes me annoyed, so I want to stop the smell of that.

✓ Ah yes Sir, I want the cafe to strictly prohibit smoking because the smell of cigarettes always annoys me, so I want to stop that smell.

'Approve with the smoking strictly' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'strictly prohibit smoking'. 'Makes me annoyed' is better expressed as 'annoys me'. 'The smell of the cigarette' should be 'the smell of cigarettes' for generality. 'Stop the smell of that' is awkward; 'stop that smell' is clearer.

× Uh, I want to study, uh, at the University of the UK and, uh, because I am a general standard, uh, I have to take, uh, whatever knowledge about a sustainable developing.

✓ Uh, I want to study at a university in the UK and, because I am at a general level, I have to acquire knowledge about sustainable development.

'The University of the UK' is incorrect; it should be 'a university in the UK' unless referring to a specific university. 'I am a general standard' is incorrect; 'I am at a general level' or 'I have a general standard' is better. 'Take whatever knowledge about a sustainable developing' is incorrect; 'acquire knowledge about sustainable development' is correct.

× And this is one of the well known temporal in the UK.

✓ And this is one of the well-known institutions in the UK.

'Temporal' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'institutions' or 'universities'. 'Well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.