学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免语法错误和多余词汇。可以直接回答身份，然后补充相关信息。

範例: I am currently a senior high school student, and I plan to attend university in Australia next year.

建議: 回答应更准确，避免语法错误，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I study in a small city called Zhangde Gang, located in Jiangsu province, north of the Changyang River.

建議: 回答应更简洁，避免重复，使用连接词使观点更清晰。

範例: Yes, it's a good place to study because the transportation is convenient, and the food prices are affordable, which makes living there comfortable.

建議: 回答应更具体，表达更清晰，避免重复词汇。

範例: I think the fruits here are not very tasty, so I hope the restaurants can offer different styles of food or hire new chefs to improve the taste.

建議: 回答应避免重复，表达更流畅，使用连接词使内容连贯。

範例: As I mentioned, I plan to study at the University of Melbourne in Australia for about four years, and afterwards, I might return to China for further studies.

× Things I'm just 18 years old, so I'm just studying the senior school and next year I will go to the university, which is in the Australia.

✓ I am just 18 years old, so I am just studying at senior school and next year I will go to university, which is in Australia.

句子中“Things”多余且错误，应去掉；“the senior school”应为“senior school”，因为这里指的是一般的学校类型，不需要冠词；“the university”前不需要冠词，且“in the Australia”中“the”不应出现，国家名Australia前不加冠词。

× Well, I study in a small city which called Zhangde Gang in the Jiangsu province and it is the in the north of the Changyang River.

✓ Well, I study in a small city called Zhangde Gang in Jiangsu province and it is in the north of the Changyang River.

“which called”应改为“called”，更简洁；“the Jiangsu province”中“the”不应出现，省份名称前一般不加冠词；“it is the in the north”中“the”多余，应去掉。

× I was here because that the transportation of of there is very good in the end and I can just take the underground to get my school or even the price of food is cheap there.

✓ I am here because the transportation there is very good and I can just take the underground to get to my school, and even the price of food is cheap there.

“I was here”时态不对，应为现在时“am here”；“because that”错误，应为“because”；“transportation of of there”重复且错误，应为“transportation there”；“to get my school”缺少介词，应为“to get to my school”；“in the end”不合适，应去掉。

× So I think it's living standard is higher.

✓ So I think its living standard is higher.

“it's”是“it is”的缩写，表示“它是”，此处应使用物主代词“its”表示“它的”。

× Well I want to say the fruits are are not tasty, so maybe the restaurants can change for another style or even change the cook to change the food.

✓ Well, I want to say the fruits are not tasty, so maybe the restaurants can change to another style or even change the cook to change the food.

“are are”重复，应去掉一个；“change for another style”应为“change to another style”，介词用法错误。

× Just as I mentioned, I will, I will go to the Melbourne University in Australia and I will go there for about four years, about four years.

✓ Just as I mentioned, I will go to Melbourne University in Australia and I will study there for about four years.

“the Melbourne University”中“the”不应出现；“go there for about four years”表达不准确，应为“study there for about four years”。

× Maybe I will go back to China and do further studies.

✓ Maybe I will go back to China and do further studies.

该句语法正确，无需修改。