学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“Financial Inner Economics”应为“Financial and International Economics”，且句子较长且不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的专业名称，并避免冗长。

範例: I'm a student studying Financial and International Economics at the University of Sheffield, and I will complete my postgraduate degree this year.

建議: 回答中有多处语法错误和表达不清，如“she failed teacher”应为“the teachers are friendly”，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，正确表达观点，并注意主谓一致。

範例: I study at the University of Sheffield. It has a great reputation worldwide, and the teachers and classmates are very friendly. They have given me a lot of support, so I am very happy here.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“we have the three library like Diamond”应为“we have three libraries, and Diamond is my favorite”。建议使用连贯的句子，正确使用冠词和复数形式，并清晰表达观点。

範例: Of course, the environment is very beautiful. We have three libraries, and Diamond is my favorite. It is very safe and quiet, providing plenty of study spaces where I can focus on my individual coursework and workshops.

建議: 回答表达不清，语法错误较多，难以理解。建议简化句子，明确表达自己的观点，并使用正确的词汇和句型。

範例: Not really. I prefer the study environment to stay the same because changes might make me feel uncomfortable and nervous, which could affect my focus during workshops and essay writing.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，如“postgraduate age desertation”应为“postgraduate dissertation”。建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，表达清晰。

範例: In the next two months, I will finish my postgraduate studies. The dissertation is very important because it accounts for 33% of my total score, so it is crucial.

× I study in the University of Sheffield and I will finish my postgraduate this year.

✓ I study at the University of Sheffield and I will finish my postgraduate studies this year.

“postgraduate”应为复数形式“postgraduate studies”，表示研究生课程；“study in the University”应改为“study at the University”，因为表示在某大学学习用介词“at”。

× I study in the University of Sheffield.

✓ I study at the University of Sheffield.

表示在某个大学学习时，介词应使用“at”而非“in”。

× Sheffield has a great reputation in the global world and she failed teacher and classmate is so friendly.

✓ Sheffield has a great reputation in the global world and the teachers and classmates are so friendly.

“she failed teacher and classmate”语法错误，应为“the teachers and classmates”；且主语为复数，谓语动词应为“are”。

× Support many helps to me.

✓ They provide me with a lot of support.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和正确的谓语，应改为完整句子表达“他们给了我很多帮助”。

× I'm very happy in this Sheffield.

✓ I'm very happy in Sheffield.

“this Sheffield”用法不当，地名前一般不加指示代词“this”。

× we have the three library like Diamond is my favorite library.

✓ we have three libraries, and Diamond is my favorite library.

“library”应为复数“libraries”，且句子应分开表达更清晰。

× It's very safe and it's very quiet and it suffer a lot of the study space.

✓ It's very safe and very quiet, and it offers a lot of study space.

“it suffer a lot of the study space”语法错误，应为“it offers a lot of study space”，且“study space”前不加定冠词“the”。

× I can focus on my IC and my workshop.

✓ I can focus on my individual coursework and my workshop.

“IC”缩写不明确，建议写全称“individual coursework”，使表达更清晰。

× if this study speeds make more change it make me feel the stranger and I can't more more convenient on my workshop on my essay and I feel a little nervous for this stranger situation.

✓ If this study space makes more changes, it will make me feel stranger, and I can't be more convenient with my workshop and my essay, and I feel a little nervous about this strange situation.

“study speeds”应为“study space”；“make”应根据主语变为“makes”；“stranger”应为“strange”；“can't more more convenient”表达不清，应改为“can't be more convenient”；“for this stranger situation”应为“about this strange situation”。

× In next two months, I will finish my post graduate because it's very important.

✓ In the next two months, I will finish my postgraduate studies because it's very important.

“In next two months”应加定冠词“the”；“post graduate”应连写为“postgraduate studies”。

× The postgraduate age desertation score, it has 33% in my the total score.

✓ The postgraduate dissertation score accounts for 33% of my total score.

“age desertation”应为“dissertation”；“it has 33% in my the total score”表达不正确，应改为“accounts for 33% of my total score”。