学习— Part 1 評分報告

× I do work and I have already graduated myself from Tasha University and now I am working full time as a nursing officer in Janakpuri Super Speciality Hospital.

✓ I do work and I have already graduated from Tasha University and now I am working full time as a nursing officer in Janakpuri Super Speciality Hospital.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used here. 'Graduated' is a transitive verb that does not require a reflexive pronoun. The correct form is 'I have graduated from...'. Using 'myself' is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect in this context.

× I study in my room when there is no one.

✓ I study in my room when there is no one else.

The sentence is missing the word 'else' after 'no one' to complete the meaning. 'No one' alone is acceptable but 'no one else' clarifies that the room is empty of other people, which fits the intended meaning better.

× I study in my room when there is no one.

✓ I study in my room when there is no one around.

Adding 'around' after 'no one' is more natural in English to indicate absence of people nearby. The original sentence is understandable but can be improved for clarity and naturalness.

× I usually study at night because it is quiet and calming and I can concentrate better.

✓ I usually study at night because it is quiet and calming, and I can concentrate better.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate the two independent clauses for better readability. The pronouns are used correctly.

× Yes, my bedroom is a really good place to study because I have a table and a computer there with a flashlight so that I do not disturb any other person sleeping there and I can concentrate better in my room because of the better environment I get in my room.

✓ Yes, my bedroom is a really good place to study because I have a table and a computer there with a flashlight so that I do not disturb anyone else sleeping there, and I can concentrate better in my room because of the better environment I get there.

The phrase 'any other person' is better replaced with 'anyone else' for naturalness. Also, repeating 'in my room' twice is redundant; replacing the second with 'there' improves flow. Adding a comma before 'and' separates the clauses properly.

× Yes, I would like to make changes to my study place.

✓ Yes, I would like to make changes to my study place.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× For example, I would like to have a flow chart so that I can follow that chart.

✓ For example, I would like to have a flow chart so that I can follow it.

Using 'that chart' is repetitive; replacing it with the pronoun 'it' is more natural and concise.

× So it is important to have a chart in your room to get your timetable on process.

✓ So it is important to have a chart in your room to keep your timetable in process.

The phrase 'get your timetable on process' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' with 'process' to indicate ongoing progress. Alternatively, 'to keep your timetable on track' would also be correct.

× My future study plans are having a degree of masters and later on doing the CRNA course which is nurse anesthetist course and it is really necessary for me to reach the epitome of my profession.

✓ My future study plans are to obtain a master's degree and later on to do the CRNA course, which is the nurse anesthetist course, and it is really necessary for me to reach the epitome of my profession.

The phrase 'having a degree of masters' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to obtain a master's degree'. Also, 'doing the CRNA course' is better expressed as 'to do the CRNA course'. Adding commas improves sentence clarity. 'The nurse anesthetist course' requires the definite article 'the'.