学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 대답하고 있지만, 불필요한 정보(나이)를 포함하여 자연스럽지 않고 효과적이지 않습니다. 간결하고 명확하게 전공과 학생임을 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

範例: I'm a student majoring in media.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 내용이 명확하지 않습니다. 구체적인 학습 내용과 경험을 명확하고 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I study media at Cooler University, where I have learned video production, Photoshop, and how to use dollies for filming.

建議: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적 오류가 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간단하고 명확한 문장으로 친구들과의 관계와 공부 환경에 대해 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study. I made many friends who share my passion for media, and we often discuss our dreams and ideas together.

建議: 답변이 매우 혼란스럽고 질문에 제대로 대답하지 못했습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 대답하고, 이유를 명확하고 간결하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I wouldn't like to change my university, but I prefer studying in a cafe because it's quiet and comfortable.

建議: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 미래 계획을 명확하고 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I plan to participate in an exchange program and hope to study in Germany in the near future.

× I'm a student, my age is 22 and my major is media.

✓ I'm a student, my age is 22 and my major is media.

No singular/plural issue detected in this sentence.

× I'm studying media in the Cooler university.

✓ I'm studying media at Cooler University.

The definite article 'the' is not used before most university names in English. Also, 'in' is less common than 'at' when referring to studying at a university.

× In this university, I guess starting and everything, for example, I can I learned how to make the video and how to make them.

✓ At this university, I started learning everything; for example, I learned how to make videos and how to edit them.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct sentence structure and clarity are needed. 'Starting and everything' is vague and ungrammatical. 'Make the video' should be 'make videos' and 'how to make them' should be 'how to edit them' or similar.

× Photoshop and then I learned dollies.

✓ Photoshop, and then I learned about dollies.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate clauses. Also, 'learned dollies' is unclear; 'learned about dollies' is more appropriate.

× Yes, it is. Well, I. God's freshman. I made many friends which is. Is that my dream is same? And we talk about the media and our dreams so as as can make them every communication.

✓ Yes, it is. Well, I'm a freshman. I made many friends who share the same dream. We talk about media and our dreams so that we can communicate better.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'God's freshman' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm a freshman.' 'Which is' and 'Is that my dream is same?' are ungrammatical. The last sentence is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× No, I don't like. I like to study in the cafe because this is very. Prairie. Good place to study?

✓ No, I don't like it. I like to study in the cafe because it is a very quiet and good place to study.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Prairie' is likely a mispronunciation or error; 'quiet' or 'peaceful' fits better. Also, 'I don't like' needs an object ('it').

× I don't like the like. I do like who I believe because there was very true Madame.

✓ I don't like the library. I do like the cafe because it is very quiet and comfortable.

The original sentence is unclear and contains pronoun errors. 'Who I believe' and 'there was very true Madame' do not make sense. Likely, the student meant 'library' and 'cafe' and wanted to express preference for the cafe because it is quiet.

× I'm starting on yours because I went to the eye.

✓ I'm starting next year because I want to go abroad.

The original sentence is unclear and contains tense and vocabulary errors. 'Starting on yours' and 'went to the eye' are incorrect. The student likely meant to say they will start next year and want to go abroad.

× Will go to the exchange student.

✓ I will go as an exchange student.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Will go to the exchange student' is incorrect; it should be 'I will go as an exchange student.'

× I hope to go Germany to study.

✓ I hope to go to Germany to study.

The preposition 'to' is missing before 'Germany.' This is a preposition error (ID 11), but since the focus is on future tense, the correction is included here.