学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Avoid repeating words and try to form complete sentences. Start with a direct response and then add supporting details logically. For example, mention your current status and briefly explain your situation without redundancy.

範例: I am currently a student preparing for academic education. It is challenging to balance my studies with family responsibilities, as I have a baby and a husband to take care of.

建議: Try to give a clear and concise answer. Avoid repeating phrases and focus on giving reasons logically. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I study in my hometown because I want to stay close to my old friends. Also, my friends influenced me to join the school here.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your opinion directly and support it with reasons. Avoid repeating words and finish your thoughts clearly.

範例: I don't think my hometown is the best place to study because bigger city schools or schools abroad offer better opportunities and facilities.

建議: Be specific about the changes you want and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I would like my school to have more academic resources and extra facilities, such as sports grounds and playgrounds, to improve the learning environment.

建議: Your answer should be clearer and more structured. State your future plans directly and provide some details about your goals. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

範例: My future plan is to pursue a Master's degree in Research to advance my education and gain deeper knowledge in my field.

× Actually, I am a student an now I'm preparing for academic academic educations.

✓ Actually, I am a student and now I'm preparing for academic education.

The phrase 'academic academic educations' is incorrect due to redundancy and plural form. 'Education' is an uncountable noun here, so it should be singular. Also, 'an' should be 'and' to connect the clauses properly.

× That was not uh, that was not a simple thing for like simple thing for a lady who manage had baby and husband with a engage engage her engaging her life.

✓ That was not a simple thing for a lady who manages having a baby and a husband while engaging in her life.

The sentence has multiple issues: incorrect verb forms ('manage' should be 'manages'), missing articles ('a baby', 'a husband'), and awkward phrasing ('engage engage her engaging her life'). The corrected sentence uses proper verb forms and articles, and clarifies the meaning.

× Actually, I study in my hometown of the reason why I the reason why I study, study in my own place to to chat with my to chit chat with my old friends.

✓ Actually, I study in my hometown. The reason why I study in my own place is to chat with my old friends.

The original sentence is repetitive and has incorrect structure. The corrected version removes repetition and uses proper sentence structure with a clear subject and verb agreement.

× An also influenced by my friends I I joined in my school in my hometown.

✓ Also, influenced by my friends, I joined my school in my hometown.

The original sentence misuses 'An' instead of 'Also' and lacks proper commas to separate clauses. The correction fixes conjunction usage and punctuation for clarity.

× I think that is not the I, I think there is not the place I want to learn.

✓ I think that is not the place I want to learn.

The phrase 'there is not the place' is incorrect. The correct form is 'that is not the place' to indicate a specific place.

× It is because when it is because sometimes I feel if I go and study in the big City Schools, big City Schools and any, any abroad schools are abroad schools.

✓ It is because sometimes I feel that if I go and study in big city schools or any abroad schools, it would be better.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. The correction removes repetition and clarifies the conditional feeling using proper tense and structure.

× That was the.

✓ That was the case.

The original sentence is incomplete. Adding 'case' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× Oh, actually, yes, I love I like to change my school with more academiques an extra facilities with any sports, extra facilities with sports and up and playing things and also and also.

✓ Oh, actually, yes, I would like to change my school to one with more academic and extra facilities, including sports and playgrounds.

The original sentence has modal verb misuse ('love I like to change'), incorrect word forms ('academiques'), and awkward phrasing. The correction uses 'would like' for polite desire, corrects word forms, and clarifies the meaning.

× Actually, my next move to a education, education in advance with my education is UM.

✓ Actually, my next move is to pursue advanced education at UM.

The original sentence lacks proper future tense structure and has repetition. The correction uses 'is to pursue' to indicate future plans clearly.

× Mastis a Masters in Research Masters in research.

✓ It is a Master's in Research.

The original sentence has spelling errors ('Mastis') and redundancy. The correction fixes spelling and simplifies the phrase.