学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，信息表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地介绍自己的身份和专业，避免重复和语法错误。

範例: I am currently a third-year student majoring in International Economic Law at a university in Shanghai. I am expected to graduate next year.

建議: 回答内容不连贯，表达混乱，缺乏清晰的地点描述。建议直接说明学习地点，并用简单句子描述环境。

範例: I study in a suburban district of Shanghai, which is quite far from the city center. It is a peaceful and quiet area, suitable for studying.

建議: 回答内容不明确，句子结构混乱，缺乏具体理由。建议明确表达观点，并提供具体原因支持。

範例: I think it is a good place to study because the environment is quiet and the residents are friendly. Although there are few entertainment activities, it helps me focus on my studies.

建議: 回答表达混乱，信息不清晰。建议明确指出想要改进的方面，并用简单句子说明原因。

範例: I like the campus and the teachers, but the transportation is inconvenient because the subway is not open yet. I hope they can improve the public transport soon.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地说明未来计划，并用具体例子支持。

範例: After graduation, I plan to study abroad and continue researching cutting-edge legal fields such as data law and AI governance.

× I'm a junior junior student now.

✓ I'm a junior student now.

这里的“junior junior student”重复了“junior”，应去掉重复部分，保持单数形式。

× I am studying in Shanghai which is major in the International economic law and will graduate.

✓ I am studying in Shanghai, majoring in International Economic Law, and will graduate next year.

“major in”应改为“majoring in”，表示正在学习某专业；句子缺少逗号分隔，且“will graduate”后应接时间状语。

× Shanghai and the charming districts, which is a really a suburban area of Shanghai and it's a solar, solar land of Shanghai.

✓ Shanghai has charming districts, which are really suburban areas of Shanghai, and it's a solar land of Shanghai.

“which is”应改为“which are”，因为指代复数“districts”；句子结构不完整，需补充主语和谓语。

× And that is really far from the city center and.

✓ And that is really far from the city center.

句子末尾多余“and”，应去掉。

× I think it's a really good place to study because it requires and the last people and the residents in there, even though we have a we have nothing and out work activities and on the island.

✓ I think it's a really good place to study because it attracts many people and residents there, even though we have few work activities on the island.

“requires”用错，应为“attracts”；“the last people”应为“many people”；句子结构混乱，需理顺表达。

× So we have to always have to do some.

✓ So we always have to do some activities.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，需补充“activities”使句子完整。

× Icing is quite good for me because I think the Dollar Tree that can sing and the teachers are a post code.

✓ The environment is quite good for me because I think the dormitory is clean and the teachers are very supportive.

原句词汇错误，“Icing”应为“environment”，“Dollar Tree that can sing”无意义，推测为“dormitory is clean”；“a post code”错误，应为“supportive”。

× But I think it's just a transformation is very inconvenient and subway having have nots not open and up to now so I think.

✓ But I think the transportation is very inconvenient, and the subway has not opened yet up to now.

“transformation”应为“transportation”；“having have nots not open”语法错误，应为“has not opened”；句子结构需调整。

× A study abroad after I graduate and I will keep on keep on researching the law which is which is a cutting edge program such as a data load and the air governance and this.

✓ I will study abroad after I graduate, and I will keep on researching law, which is a cutting-edge field such as data law and air governance.

“A study abroad”应为“I will study abroad”；“keep on keep on”重复，应去掉一个；“data load”应为“data law”；句子结构需调整使表达清晰。