学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は基本的な情報を伝えていますが、文が断片的で流れが不自然です。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、文をつなげて一つのまとまった文にし、具体的な説明を加えると良いでしょう。

範例: I am currently a senior at my university, where I am studying commerce with a focus on entrepreneurship because I aspire to become an entrepreneur in the future.

建議: 場所の説明が断片的で、文法的な誤りもあります。より自然な英語にするために、文をつなげて具体的な情報を整理し、正しい前置詞や形容詞を使いましょう。

範例: I study at a major university in Tokyo, which is one of the oldest universities in Japan. The campus is located in the center of Tokyo, making it a very pleasant place to walk around.

建議: 回答が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確にし、文をつなげて具体的な説明を加えることで、より効果的な回答になります。

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to study because there are many bookstores, including second-hand ones, where we can easily find textbooks at affordable prices.

建議: 回答が繰り返しや断片的な表現で構成されており、自然さに欠けます。明確なトピック文を使い、理由を付け加えて一貫した文にしましょう。

範例: I do not want to change the place where I study because I think it is the best environment for me to focus and learn effectively.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、流れも不自然です。具体的な計画を明確にし、正しい文法で表現する練習が必要です。

範例: In the future, I would like to study abroad in England, for example at Cambridge University, because it has many famous professors, and I want to learn from them.

× I'm studying at major university, which is a old university in Japan.

✓ I'm studying at a major university, which is an old university in Japan.

The indefinite articles 'a' and 'an' are used before singular nouns. 'Major' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct. 'Old' starts with a vowel sound, so 'an' is correct. Using the wrong article causes grammatical errors.

× Location at the campus is Autonomies in Tokyo, the center of Tokyo.

✓ The campus is located in Autonomous in Tokyo, the center of Tokyo.

The phrase 'Location at the campus is Autonomies' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'located in' to indicate the position of the campus. Also, 'Autonomies' seems to be a mishearing or typo; assuming 'Autonomous' or a proper noun is intended.

× So very nice. To walk.

✓ So it is very nice to walk there.

The original sentences are fragments and lack a subject and verb. Combining them into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Becauses Jezza. A lot of. Book Store. And second hand bookstore.

✓ Because there are a lot of bookstores and second-hand bookstores.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect quantifiers and articles. 'A lot of' should be followed by plural nouns without articles. Also, 'bookstore' should be plural to match 'a lot of'.

× So we can easily to get a textbook and cheap place.

✓ So we can easily get textbooks at a cheap price.

The phrase 'easily to get' is incorrect; 'to' should be removed. Also, 'a cheap place' is unclear; 'at a cheap price' is more appropriate when referring to cost.

× I don't want to. Change my place becauses the. Place. Where I. I'm studying now, is the best place? I think so.

✓ I don't want to change my place because the place where I'm studying now is the best place, I think.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses 'becauses' incorrectly. Combining the fragments into a coherent sentence and correcting 'becauses' to 'because' improves clarity.

× I want. I do not want to change.

✓ I do not want to change.

The phrase 'I want.' is incomplete and unnecessary. Removing it makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I want to study at upload. For example, England.

✓ I want to study abroad. For example, in England.

The word 'upload' is incorrect; the correct word is 'abroad' when referring to studying in another country. Also, 'in England' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I want to study at Cambridge University 'cause there's a lot of teachers, that is. Very famous SO. I want to talk them.

✓ I want to study at Cambridge University because there are a lot of teachers who are very famous, so I want to talk to them.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage: 'that is' should be 'who are' to refer to people. Also, 'talk them' should be 'talk to them' to use the correct verb-preposition combination.