视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases (e.g., "the how people are living").

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing local landscapes. For example, I often climb a nearby hill to capture sweeping views of the town at sunrise, when the light and stars create a calm atmosphere that highlights how people live and the colours of the sky.

建議: Organise the answer with a clear preference statement followed by 1–2 specific reasons and use linking words. Remove filler words (uh) and correct word choice ("flats" vs "apartment blocks"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I prefer rural views because I live near the countryside and the scenery is more open. For instance, there are no tall apartment blocks, so I can photograph rolling fields and long horizons that look especially attractive at sunset.

建議: Answer directly about preference (own country or others) and give specific comparisons with clear reasons. Avoid redundant phrases and correct grammar. Use linking words like "however" or "also" to connect ideas.

範例: I prefer views in my own country for now because I know many scenic spots close to home. However, I am curious about places like Tokyo, which I have heard offer striking cityscapes, so I would like to compare them when I travel abroad.

× I enjoy taking pictures of the landscape of my town sometimes because I find them beautiful when you get up there and can look down to the how people are living, how the stars are shining and the sunset or the sunrise being pleasant to look at.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of the landscape of my town sometimes because I find it beautiful when you get up there and can look down at how people are living, how the stars shine, and how the sunset or sunrise is pleasant to look at.

Multiple issues: 'the landscape' is a singular concept so refer with 'it' not 'them' (subject-pronoun agreement). 'Look down to the how' is incorrect preposition and word order; use 'look down at how'. 'How the stars are shining' is acceptable but simpler present simple 'how the stars shine' suits habitual/general descriptions. 'The sunset or the sunrise being pleasant' uses a gerund phrase incorrectly; use clause 'how the sunset or sunrise is pleasant to look at.' Suggestions: match singular/plural referents, use 'at' after 'look down', prefer simple present for general facts, and use finite verbs rather than '-ing' clause here.

× I myself live in a rural area but I'm close to the urban area but still I take my usual pictures from the where I live in suburban rural areas where uh, there is no flats or uh, huge uh, tall buildings and the landscapes came out beautiful.

✓ I live in a rural area but I'm close to an urban area, yet I usually take my pictures from where I live in the suburban-rural area, where there are no flats or huge tall buildings and the landscapes come out beautiful.

Problems: unnecessary 'I myself' and awkward repetition of 'but'. 'From the where I live' is wrong; use 'from where I live' or 'from the place where I live'. Use 'an urban area' (article). 'There is no flats' is ungrammatical: plural noun requires 'there are no flats' (there be and plural agreement). 'Came out beautiful' mixes past tense with present habitual; use 'come out beautiful' for general habitual result. Suggestions: streamline redundancies, correct prepositions ('from where'), fix there-be agreement, and keep tense consistent.

× I myself live in a rural area but I'm close to the urban area but still I take my usual pictures from the where I live in suburban rural areas where uh, there is no flats or uh, huge uh, tall buildings and the landscapes came out beautiful.

✓ I live in a rural area but I'm close to an urban area, yet I usually take my pictures from where I live in the suburban-rural area, where there are no flats or huge tall buildings and the landscapes come out beautiful.

'There is no flats' is incorrect because 'there is' is singular while 'flats' is plural. Use 'there are no flats'. Also use appropriate articles: 'an urban area'. Suggestion: match 'there is/are' to the noun number and use articles correctly.

× and the landscapes came out beautiful.

✓ and the landscapes come out beautiful.

'Came out' is past tense, but the speaker describes a habitual or general observation, so present simple 'come out' is appropriate. Suggestion: use present simple for regular occurrences or general truths.

× I have never been to other countries, but I would be glad to take a look at that.

✓ I have never been to other countries, but I would be glad to take a look at them.

'Take a look at that' uses singular demonstrative 'that' while referring to 'other countries' (plural). Use 'them' or 'those' to match plural noun. Suggestion: ensure demonstratives/pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× I heard that in towns of uh, Tokyo or in towns of Japan or other countries, there is very many pleasant views, but my country is also very beautiful and can compete with them easily.

✓ I heard that in towns in Tokyo, in towns in Japan, or in other countries, there are many pleasant views, but my country is also very beautiful and can compete with them easily.

Errors: 'in towns of Tokyo' should be 'in towns in Tokyo' or 'in Tokyo'. 'There is very many pleasant views' mixes singular 'there is' with plural 'views' and uses 'very many' awkwardly; use 'there are many pleasant views'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('in' rather than 'of'), match there-be with plural nouns, and prefer 'many' to 'very many' in natural speech.

× I heard that in towns in Tokyo, in towns in Japan, or in other countries, there are many pleasant views, but my country is also very beautiful and can compete with them easily.

✓ I heard that in towns in Tokyo, in towns in Japan, or in other countries, there are many pleasant views, and my country is also very beautiful and can compete with them easily.

The original used 'but' which suggests contrast; 'and' is acceptable but not required. Main subject-verb agreement corrected earlier to 'there are many pleasant views'. Ensure verbs agree with subjects and conjunctions reflect intended meaning. Suggestion: choose conjunctions that match the intended relationship (contrast vs addition) and verify agreement.