视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and eliminate fillers and repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Pronounce clearly and avoid repeating words. For example, replace filler 'uh' and duplicated words, and provide a specific instance of what you photograph.

範例: Yes, I do. I often take photos when I’m outdoors, especially of natural scenes and animals. For example, last weekend I photographed a family of deer in a nearby park, which helped me practice framing and lighting.

建議: Give a clear direct answer then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid repetition. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'urban landscapes' instead of 'scenery beauties').

範例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and street life. For example, city skylines, colorful markets, and historic buildings offer interesting subjects and contrasts that make my photos more dynamic.

建議: Avoid vague phrases like 'it depends' unless you explain how. Give a direct preference and then justify it with specific reasons and one example. Use linking words ('however', 'although', 'therefore') to structure the response and correct grammar ('a lot of views').

範例: Although my country has many attractive sights, I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes I haven't seen. For instance, I would love to photograph the colorful rice terraces in Southeast Asia to capture scenes unlike those at home.

× Whenever I'm outside and get opportunity to take a picture or click a picture I I take pictures of of nature, of animals and whatever I found in front of my eyes I take.

✓ Whenever I'm outside and get an opportunity to take a picture or click a picture, I take pictures of nature, animals, and whatever I find in front of my eyes.

Errors: missing article 'an' before 'opportunity' (article error, but corrected here under present participle context because 'get' requires object), repeated words 'I I' and 'of of', and wrong tense 'found' should be present 'find' to match the habitual present 'Whenever I'm outside'. Suggestion: add the article 'an', remove duplicate words, use present simple 'find' for habitual actions, and add commas for clarity.

× I prefer views urban areas over rural areas because it attracts me more than rural areas and it has more scenery beauties it it has more scenery beauty and I love to take pictures when I'm in urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas over rural areas because they attract me more and have more scenic beauty, and I love to take pictures when I'm in urban areas.

Errors: missing preposition 'in' after 'views' and awkward phrasing 'scenery beauties' (incorrect plural noun and adjective order). Also subject-pronoun agreement: 'it attracts me' should be 'they attract me' referring to 'views'. Suggestions: add 'in', change 'scenery beauties' to 'scenic beauty', and make pronouns agree with plural 'views'.

× I think it depends because my country has a lots of views but there are more countries in this world which has more beautiful views and more beautiful places in their own country.

✓ I think it depends because my country has a lot of views, but there are other countries in the world that have more beautiful views and places.

Errors: 'a lots of' is incorrect (should be 'a lot of' or 'lots of'), inconsistent plurality and relative clause agreement: 'more countries... which has' should be 'other countries... that have'. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' or 'lots of' correctly, use 'other' instead of 'more' for comparison, and ensure verb agrees with plural noun ('have'). Also simplify redundant 'more beautiful places in their own country' to 'more beautiful places'.

× So it depends But if I have to prefer views in my own country or in other country, I will definitely go with other countries.

✓ So it depends. But if I had to choose between views in my own country and in other countries, I would definitely choose other countries.

Errors: tense and conditional form: 'if I have to prefer' is awkward; use a hypothetical 'if I had to choose' or 'if I had to prefer'. Also 'in other country' should be plural 'in other countries'. The second clause should use conditional 'would' for hypothetical preference. Suggestion: use 'had to choose' and 'would choose' and match singular/plural nouns.