视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., ‘capture’ and ‘make them memorable’ say similar things). Also correct collocations: say “I love nature and scenic views” and “when I look at the photos I remember the day.”

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and mountain ridges because I enjoy capturing unique light and atmosphere, and when I look at the photos later I can clearly remember the day and place.

建議: Make the contrast clear and fix grammar (don’t use both ‘although’ and ‘but’). State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words (for example, ‘because’ or ‘since’). Use precise vocabulary: say ‘urban areas have interesting historic architecture and lively streets’ rather than ‘natural view of fields’.

範例: I prefer urban views. Urban areas often have interesting historic architecture and lively streets, so I enjoy photographing old houses, street scenes and city lights because they evoke strong memories and emotional connections.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar (e.g., ‘other countries’ not ‘another countries’, avoid ‘only’ at the end). Explain specific reasons and contrast with an example. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘although’ correctly.

範例: I prefer photographing views in other countries. Although my own country has many beautiful landscapes, I like to travel abroad to find new scenery and cultural details — for instance, I recently photographed traditional markets in Spain, which offered visual elements I don’t see at home.

× I love taking pictures because I am a person who loves environment and natural view.

✓ I love taking pictures because I am a person who loves the environment and natural views.

The nouns 'environment' and 'natural view' need correct articles and plurality. Use 'the environment' when referring to the natural world in general. 'Natural views' should be plural because the speaker refers to different scenes. Suggestion: use 'the environment' and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× So I want to capture all the moments in photos to make them memorable.

✓ So I want to capture moments in photos to make them memorable.

The phrase 'all the moments' is redundant and awkward here. Removing 'all the' makes the sentence more natural. Also 'in photos' is acceptable but 'as photos' or 'in photographs' can be alternatives. Suggestion: simplify expressions and avoid unnecessary determiners.

× So whenever I look for photos and I remember the day and the time.

✓ So whenever I look at the photos I remember the day and the time.

This sentence fragment lacked a main verb phrase and used 'look for photos' incorrectly. 'Look at the photos' means viewing existing photos. The original was a fragment; correcting it makes it a complete sentence. Suggestion: ensure sentences have subject and main verb and use correct verb-preposition collocations.

× Although I love capturing views in rural areas but mostly I prefer urban areas because they have natural view of fields and the old houses which are more interesting and they also are having emotional and sentimental connections.

✓ Although I love capturing views in rural areas, I mostly prefer urban areas because they have natural views of fields and old houses, which are more interesting and often have emotional and sentimental connections.

Using both 'Although' and 'but' is redundant; use one conjunction. 'Natural view' should be 'natural views' and 'the old houses' -> 'old houses' is more natural here. 'They also are having' is incorrect progressive; use simple present 'often have'. Suggestion: avoid double conjunctions, pluralize countable nouns, and use simple present for general statements.

× As there are a lot of places in my country where I can get environmental view but I want to explore in another countries because in my country the all the views are easily available but I want new things and want to adventure in other countries so I prefer other countries only.

✓ Although there are a lot of places in my country where I can enjoy environmental views, I want to explore other countries because the views in my country are easily available and I want new experiences and adventures, so I prefer other countries.

Multiple issues: 'As' at sentence start can be okay but paired with 'but' is confusing—use 'Although' or restructure. 'Get environmental view' is incorrect collocation; use 'enjoy environmental views'. 'Explore in another countries' should be 'explore other countries' (no 'in', and 'countries' plural). 'The all the views' is wrong order; use 'the views' or just 'views'. 'Want to adventure' is incorrect verb use; use 'have adventures' or 'seek adventure'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions (no 'in' here), correct collocations ('enjoy views'), correct article order, and idiomatic verbs for 'adventure'.