视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb and article errors (e.g., “a really passionate” → “really passionate”, “chance” → “had the chance”, “to taking” → “to take”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I’m really passionate about photography, and if I had the chance I would train to be a professional photographer in the future. For example, I love capturing landscapes and street scenes because they tell stories about places and people.

建議: Give a clear choice at the start and support it with specific, organized reasons using linking words. Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., ‘Drudera’ unclear — use ‘rural areas’; ‘specially’ → ‘especially’; ‘to taking’ → ‘to take’). Limit to two–three sentences.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy photographing nature. For example, I especially like capturing birds, trees and sunsets, since these subjects create colorful and peaceful images. Also, rural scenes often show everyday life and human interactions in an authentic way.

建議: Answer directly and give concrete reasons with better sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., ‘in my country include’ → ‘my country has’, ‘people who are own identity’ → ‘people with their own identities’, ‘love to being photographer’ → ‘would like to be a photographer’). Use one linking word like ‘because’ or ‘for example’.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has rich traditions and distinctive cultures. For example, I enjoy photographing festivals and local markets since they show people’s identities and everyday life, which makes my photos more meaningful.

× This is because I'm a really passionate about these things and if I could chance to become a photographer in the future then I would definitely do because it is one of one of my dreams of my life.

✓ This is because I'm really passionate about these things, and if I had the chance to become a photographer in the future I would definitely do it because it is one of the dreams of my life.

Error type 22: Article errors and other structure issues. The phrase 'a really passionate' incorrectly uses the indefinite article with an adjective; it should be 'I'm really passionate'. 'If I could chance' is incorrect phrasing for a hypothetical opportunity; use 'if I had the chance'. Also add the pronoun 'it' after 'do' for clarity and remove the duplicated 'one of'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles before adjectives, use 'have the chance' for hypothetical opportunity, and include objects like 'it' after verbs that need them. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× So yeah, I really love to taking pictures of different things.

✓ So yeah, I really love taking pictures of different things.

Error type 8: Verb + -ing form. After the verb 'love' when expressing a general preference, use the gerund without 'to' (love taking), not 'love to taking'. Suggestion: use 'love taking' or 'love to take' (both correct), but not 'love to taking'. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× I prefer views in Drudera in particular I'd love to take pictures about the birds and trees and specially sunset that I love to taking pictures and that is the reason that I love to see views different kind of the rural natures and the human beings as well.

✓ I prefer views in Drudera. In particular, I'd love to take pictures of birds and trees, especially sunsets. I love photographing different kinds of rural nature and people as well.

Error type 11: Incorrect use of prepositions and 8: Verb + -ing form and 18: Incorrect order of adjectives/phrase structure. Use 'take pictures of' not 'take pictures about'. 'specially' should be 'especially'. 'sunset' should be plural 'sunsets' in this context. 'I love to taking' should be 'I love photographing' or 'I love to take pictures'. 'different kind of the rural natures' is incorrect; use 'different kinds of rural nature'. Suggestions: use 'of' with 'take pictures', correct adverb to 'especially', use plural where general, and simplify to 'photograph' or 'take pictures of'. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Uh, well to be honest, I prefer views in my country. This is because in my country include a lot of traditions, cultures and people who are own identity of them.

✓ Uh, well to be honest, I prefer views in my country. This is because my country includes a lot of traditions, cultures and people who have their own identity.

Error type 6: Present tense issue and 11: Incorrect use of prepositions/pronouns and 12: Incorrect use of pronouns. The original sentence uses 'in my country include' which lacks a subject; correct is 'my country includes'. 'people who are own identity of them' is ungrammatical; use 'people who have their own identity'. Suggestions: ensure the subject matches the verb in present tense ('my country includes') and use 'have their own identity' to express possession correctly. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So I love to being photographer in my country.

✓ So I would love to be a photographer in my country.

Error type 8: Verb + -ing form and 22: Article errors. 'love to being' is incorrect; use 'would love to be' or 'love being'. Also include the article 'a' before 'photographer'. Suggestions: use 'would love to be a photographer' for a desire about the future or 'love being a photographer' for a general preference. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× This is because there are a lot of traditions are included and I love to see them.

✓ This is because there are a lot of traditions, and I love to see them.

Error type 6: Present tense issue and 26: Sentence structure errors. The phrase 'there are a lot of traditions are included' is ungrammatical because it repeats a verb; use either 'there are a lot of traditions' or 'a lot of traditions are included'. Suggestions: remove the extra verb to form a correct clause and keep parallel structure: 'there are a lot of traditions, and I love to see them.' Grammar problem type ID: 6