视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), avoid hesitations and irrelevant fragments. Use 2–3 supporting sentences with clear time/place and what you liked about the view, linked logically (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Check basic grammar (past tense) and pronunciation of key words.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me remember places. For example, last week I took photos while traveling on Road X, especially at sunrise, when the light made the landscape look beautiful. I like capturing colors and details so I can share them with friends later.

建議: Give a clear preference in the first sentence (urban or rural) and then support it with specific reasons and linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid invented words; use accurate vocabulary like "rural areas", "open spaces", "peaceful", "scenery". Keep total to 2–3 sentences and correct conditional mistakes.

範例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy open spaces and natural scenery. For example, quiet fields and hills offer peaceful views and interesting textures for my photos, which I find more inspiring than busy city streets.

建議: Answer directly: say whether you prefer domestic or foreign views and give specific reasons. Use clear linking words (so, because, therefore) and concrete examples (landmarks, culture, nature). Avoid unclear phrases like "not free" or "toggling"; choose simple accurate vocabulary. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and grammatically correct.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures that I don't see at home. For instance, when I travel abroad I like visiting famous landmarks and local markets to take photos that show how people live in that place.

× Definitely yes I'm sorry taking a photo of last week when I'm traveling at Rd. especially with 2 deals then and taking that early.

✓ Definitely yes. I'm sorry, but I was taking photos last week when I was traveling on Rd., especially at two viewpoints, and I took them early in the morning.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: missing punctuation, incorrect tense forms, unclear nouns ('2 deals'), and awkward word order. I corrected verb tenses to past continuous and simple past to match the past action ('was taking','took'), added necessary articles and prepositions ('on Rd.', 'at two viewpoints'), and clarified meaning. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, use consistent past tense for past events, and replace unclear phrases with precise nouns.

× I guess I will endural area to open areas.

✓ I guess I prefer rural areas to urban areas.

The sentence uses incorrect word choice ('endural') and wrong comparison structure. I replaced 'endural' with 'prefer rural' and used the standard comparative pattern 'prefer X to Y'. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('rural','urban') and the phrase 'prefer A to B' to express preferences.

× If I was familiar about providing experiment of this photo is incredible.

✓ If I were familiar with the camera settings, I could produce an incredible photo.

The original mixes conditional ideas incorrectly and uses wrong prepositions and nouns ('providing experiment'). I used the subjunctive 'If I were' for hypothetical conditions, corrected 'familiar with' and clarified intent: ability to produce better photos using appropriate modal 'could'. Suggestion: use 'familiar with' for knowing something and 'If I were' for unreal conditions; pair with a modal like 'could' to show result.

× Because those who are not free every day.

✓ Because some people are not free every day.

The fragment lacks a clear subject reference and is not a complete sentence. I replaced vague 'those who' with 'some people' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a clear subject and verb; avoid sentence fragments.

× So every time I'm toggling abroad, I try to see if it's still as myself I can.

✓ So whenever I travel abroad, I try to see as much as I can.

The original contains incorrect verb choice ('toggling') and awkward phrasing ('see if it's still as myself I can'). I replaced 'toggling' with 'travel' and simplified to 'see as much as I can' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use common verbs for travel ('travel','go abroad') and idiomatic expressions like 'as much as I can' to express effort or extent.