视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat “love” too often).

範例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and cityscapes and then share the best shots on social media or send them to friends. This helps me remember special moments and makes me feel happy.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear contrast structure and correct unclear phrases. Use linking words (however, although) and give specific reasons. Fix vocabulary/phrasing mistakes (e.g., “Basel people like say” is unclear). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: It depends, but I slightly prefer rural views for their tranquility. However, urban views appeal to me because of modern architecture and easy access to transport and cafes, so I enjoy both depending on my mood.

建議: Be direct and avoid vague or repetitive phrasing. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference or balanced view, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use formal connectors instead of filler words like “well”.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I find its landscapes especially diverse, from mountains to beaches. For instance, last year I photographed a dramatic coastline and a nearby forest, which showed how varied and beautiful my country is to both residents and tourists.

× Yes definitely I loved taking pictures.

✓ Yes, definitely I love taking pictures.

The student used past tense 'loved' while expressing a general preference; use present simple 'love' for habitual actions or general likes. Suggestion: Use present simple to state ongoing preferences: 'I love taking pictures.'

× Whenever I travel to somewhere or a special moment I love to taking pictures and I share them on social media, send them to friends.

✓ Whenever I travel somewhere or experience a special moment, I love to take pictures and share them on social media or send them to friends.

Problems: 'to somewhere' is incorrect preposition/phrase, 'a special moment' needs clearer verb 'experience', 'to taking' mixes infinitive with -ing, and sentence lacks parallel structure for 'share' and 'send'. Suggestion: Use 'travel somewhere', 'experience a special moment', use 'to take' (infinitive) or 'taking' consistently, and keep verbs parallel: 'take pictures and share them.'

× Really gives me feel great and also kept my memories alive.

✓ It really makes me feel great and also keeps my memories alive.

Problems: missing subject 'It', incorrect verb forms 'gives me feel' (should be 'makes me feel'), and tense inconsistency 'kept' (past) versus ongoing habit (use present 'keeps'). Suggestion: Use subject + 'makes me feel' for emotional effects and present simple 'keeps' for lasting results.

× Also Basel people like say and access to transportation easily.

✓ Also, people in Basel like the easy access to transportation.

Problems: word order and missing preposition 'in Basel', incorrect phrase 'like say and access' is unclear. Use 'people in Basel' and noun phrase 'easy access to transportation'. Suggestion: Rearrange to 'people in Basel like the easy access to transportation' for clarity.

× So I also prefer countryside because of its pure nature and calmer environment and peacefulness.

✓ So I also prefer the countryside because of its pure nature, calmer environment, and peacefulness.

Problems: missing article 'the' before 'countryside', awkward repetition of similar nouns without commas. Use 'the countryside' and list qualities with commas. Suggestion: Include 'the' and use commas to separate adjectives/nouns: 'the countryside because of its pure nature, calmer environment, and peacefulness.'

× Well, all countries have unique perspectives, views.

✓ Well, all countries have unique perspectives and views.

Problem: comma incorrectly used to separate closely related nouns; use 'and' to connect them. Suggestion: Connect the nouns with 'and' for natural phrasing.

× Well, when it comes to my country, I would say my country is the best and unique 'cause it's beautiful and diversity in nature makes it much more enjoyable for me as well As for tourists.

✓ Well, when it comes to my country, I would say my country is the best and unique because it's beautiful, and its diversity in nature makes it much more enjoyable for me as well as for tourists.

Problems: informal 'cause' should be 'because', missing possessive 'its' before 'diversity', capitalization error 'As', and missing 'as' in 'as for tourists' to form 'as for tourists' or better 'as for tourists' changed to 'as for tourists' but more natural 'as for tourists' -> 'as for tourists' kept. Also present tense consistency: use present simple 'makes'. Suggestion: Use 'because', add 'its diversity', correct capitalization, and use 'as well as for tourists' for clarity.