视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and redundant phrases, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., atmosphere, scenery) and limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because the scenery and atmosphere often lift my mood. For example, I enjoy photographing coastal sunsets and quiet parks since their colors and peace make me feel energized and calm.

建議: Provide a clearer comparison with organized support and avoid vague or exaggerated words like “godly.” Use linking words (however, whereas, for example) and specific details or examples. Keep sentences grammatically correct and compact.

範例: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban views appeal to me because of vibrant city lights and interesting architecture, whereas rural views attract me with open fields and dense trees that feel peaceful and refreshing.

建議: Be specific about what you appreciate in each. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors (e.g., “for have such”). Use one clear reason per place and give a brief example. Keep language natural and avoid unrelated ideas like “advanced technology” unless explained.

範例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. At home, I appreciate familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks that feel meaningful to me; abroad, I enjoy different architectural styles and new cityscapes that offer fresh perspectives, such as modern skylines I saw during a trip to Singapore.

× Of course I love taking pictures of different views, especially when it is a comfortable to view on and the ambience is very neat and it keeps my mood, umm, excited and energetic.

✓ Of course I love taking pictures of different views, especially when it is comfortable to look at and the ambience is very pleasant and lifts my mood, making me feel excited and energetic.

The sentence contained article and phrase errors: 'a comfortable to view on' is ungrammatical—'comfortable' does not require 'a' here and 'to view on' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'comfortable to look at' or 'comfortable to view'. 'Ambience is very neat' is awkward; 'pleasant' is more natural. 'keeps my mood, excited and energetic' should be 'lifts my mood, making me feel excited and energetic' to show cause and effect and correct word choice. Suggestion: remove the unnecessary article before 'comfortable', use correct verb phrase 'to look at', choose natural adjectives and connect clauses with 'making'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Actually, I prefer views in both urban and rural areas.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in both urban and rural areas.

This sentence is already grammatically correct. 'Prefer' correctly expresses a present preference. No change necessary. Grammar problem type ID:6

× In urban areas I tend to more likely see the city lights and more buildings, while in rural areas I tend to see more greenery and so much trees to view on and it makes my day so much lighter.

✓ In urban areas I am more likely to see city lights and many buildings, while in rural areas I tend to see more greenery and many trees to look at, which makes my day much brighter.

Problems: 'I tend to more likely see' mixes two expressions; use 'am more likely to' or 'tend to'. 'More buildings' is okay but 'many buildings' is smoother. 'So much trees' is ungrammatical—use 'many trees'. 'to view on' is incorrect; use 'to look at'. 'it makes my day so much lighter' is awkward; 'which makes my day much brighter' is more natural. Suggestion: choose one modal phrasing, correct quantifier, fix preposition 'at', and link clauses with 'which'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Because it is natural. It is umm, godly.

✓ Because it is natural; it feels almost divine.

'Because it is natural.' is a sentence fragment that needs connection to the previous sentence; joining them or using a semicolon is better. 'Godly' is unusual in this context; 'divine' or 'beautiful' is more appropriate. Suggestion: connect the fragment to the previous sentence and use a more natural adjective. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Fortunately, I prefer both country and other countries.

✓ Fortunately, I prefer both my country and other countries.

Missing possessive or article: 'both country and other countries' is incorrect. Use 'my country' to refer to the student's own country. Also 'both my country and other countries' clarifies the contrast. Suggestion: include 'my' before 'country'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I appreciate my country for have such an amazing views in this generation and I appreciate also the views in other countries for such a wonderful and advanced technology when it comes to, uh, different aspects of life.

✓ I appreciate my country for having such amazing views in this generation, and I also appreciate the views in other countries for their wonderful and advanced technology in different aspects of life.

Errors: 'for have' should be 'for having' (gerund after 'for' indicating reason). 'such an amazing views' mixes 'an' with plural 'views'—remove 'an' and use 'amazing views'. Word order: 'I appreciate also' is awkward; 'I also appreciate' is correct. 'the views in other countries for such a wonderful and advanced technology' is unclear; use 'for their wonderful and advanced technology'. Suggestion: use gerund 'having', match articles with singular/plural, place 'also' before the verb, and use possessive 'their' to relate technology to other countries. Grammar problem type ID:8