视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason with a short example. Avoid grammar errors and redundant phrases. Use correct verb forms, articles, and pluralization (e.g., “pictures,” “they will,” or better “they show”).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I find that photos capture unique angles and moods, and I often take landscape shots when I travel to remember how a place felt. For example, I recently photographed a seaside cliff at sunset to show the dramatic light.

建議: Give a clear preference statement, then explain with specific reasons and one brief comparison. Use complete sentences and appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “more peaceful,” “quaint,” “idyllic”). Avoid repetition and unfinished clauses.

範例: I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more picturesque. The countryside often has rolling hills and traditional villages that feel peaceful; however, I also appreciate urban views for their lively architecture and skyline contrasts.

建議: State your preference clearly, give a specific reason and an example, and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to make your answer coherent. Correct phrasing (e.g., “prefer views in other countries to those in my own country”).

範例: I prefer views in other countries to those in my own country because they offer new landscapes and cultural features I haven't seen before. For example, visiting Japan’s mountains and temples last year showed me scenery and architecture very different from back home, which I found fascinating.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views because I can they will display my different posture and by taking picture of different views it can help to shape my body.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they can show my different postures, and taking pictures of different views can help shape my body.

Errors: missing plural for 'picture' and 'posture', unnecessary pronoun 'they' and mixed modal constructions 'can they will', awkward repetition. Correction uses plural nouns 'pictures' and 'postures', removes the redundant 'they' and chooses a single modal 'can'. Also rephrases 'help to shape my body' to natural 'help shape my body'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms and avoid mixing modal verbs; keep sentence structure simple and parallel.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it's more and they are quaint and idyllic.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more quaint and idyllic.

Errors: 'it's more' is ungrammatical and unclear; subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issues. 'Views' is plural so use 'they are'. Also choose an appropriate comparative adjective 'quieter' instead of 'more'. Suggestion: match pronouns to plural subjects and use clear comparative forms.

× However, urban views also have have is.

✓ However, urban views also have their own appeal.

Errors: redundant 'have have' and ungrammatical 'is' create a fragment. The sentence lacks a clear object. Correction provides a complete noun phrase 'their own appeal' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure each clause has a clear subject and object.

× I prefer views in other countries in instead of my country because I think it's it's more splendid and significant in some way.

✓ I prefer views in other countries instead of in my country because I think they are more splendid and significant in some ways.

Errors: extra 'in' before 'instead', repetition 'it's it's', incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'views'. Correction removes the extra preposition, removes duplicate word, and uses 'they are' for plural agreement. Also changes 'in some way' to 'in some ways' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: watch for repeated words, correct preposition placement, and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Some views that I have never seen before, so it is more interesting to me.

✓ Some views I have never seen before are more interesting to me.

Errors: sentence is a fragment with unnecessary 'that' and a misplaced 'so'. The original has two clauses that are not correctly connected. Correction combines them into a single clear sentence and uses plural agreement 'views ... are'. Suggestion: ensure clauses are properly connected and remove unnecessary filler words for clarity.