视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng hơi dài và lặp từ; phát âm không rõ chỗ "uh" và cấu trúc câu đôi chỗ thiếu mạch lạc. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh tiếng ngắt quãng, và bổ sung một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh, thiết bị bạn dùng hoặc cảm xúc khi chụp). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý (for example, because, so).

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I like photographing mountain landscapes early in the morning because the light is soft and the scene feels peaceful.

建議: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt không tự nhiên (chẳng hạn "sometimes normal and familiar" hoặc "why fields"). Hãy dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bằng hai chi tiết cụ thể và một liên từ để làm rõ lý do. Tránh dùng các từ mơ hồ, thay bằng miêu tả cụ thể (e.g., "wide fields", "open sky").

範例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more peaceful. For example, wide fields and open skies help me relax, and I enjoy the fresh air and the simple landscapes that make me feel closer to nature.

建議: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ chưa chuẩn ("I'm will", "stronger to me", "Like everyone to see"). Cần một câu chủ đề ngắn, giải thích rõ hơn vì sao cảnh ở nước ngoài hấp dẫn (ví dụ: khác biệt văn hóa, kiến trúc, màu sắc) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng cấu trúc chuẩn và từ mô tả chính xác (e.g., "impressive", "dramatic").

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they often look very different and impressive compared with what I see at home. For example, I love European architecture with its grand cathedrals, and the vast rice terraces in Southeast Asia create dramatic, unforgettable landscapes.

× Yes I do, I am very interested in taking pictures of different views that I can look back on in those memories and also special moments in the future if I want that uh, help me to know how huge and beautiful the world is.

✓ Yes, I do. I am very interested in taking pictures of different views that I can look back on as memories, and of special moments in the future if I want to; they help me appreciate how huge and beautiful the world is.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. Use of conjunctions and relative clauses was incorrect, and 'that I can look back on in those memories' is awkward. Break into two sentences, replace 'in those memories' with 'as memories', change 'if I want that uh, help me to know' to 'if I want to; they help me appreciate' for clarity and correct verb forms. Also add commas and a semicolon for proper sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because they are quieter and more peaceful, even though they also sometimes normal and familiar.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because they are quieter and more peaceful, even though they are sometimes normal and familiar.

The phrase 'also sometimes normal and familiar' is missing the verb 'are'. Adjectives need a linking verb when describing the subject. Removing 'also' or placing 'sometimes' correctly improves flow. Correct sentence uses 'they are sometimes'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× For example, why fields and open skies help me relax and feel closer to nature.

✓ For example, fields and open skies help me relax and make me feel closer to nature.

Starting with 'why' is incorrect here; use a direct example clause. Also 'help me relax and feel closer' is acceptable but 'make me feel closer' is clearer and parallel in structure. Remove 'why' to fix sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I think that I'm will enjoy views in other countries than views in my country because they are more extraordinary and stronger to me.

✓ I think that I will enjoy views in other countries more than those in my country because they seem more extraordinary and striking to me.

Combination 'I'm will' is grammatically wrong; use either 'I'm going to' or 'I will'. Comparison 'than views in my country' is awkward; use 'more than those in my country'. 'Stronger to me' is not natural; use 'striking' or 'more impressive'. Adjust verb and pronoun references for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Like everyone to see how huge the architecture in Europe and fields in southern area.

✓ For example, everyone can see how grand the architecture in Europe is and how expansive the fields in southern regions are.

Sentence is a fragment and ungrammatical. 'Like everyone to see' is incorrect; use 'for example, everyone can see'. 'Huge the architecture' needs inversion: 'how grand the architecture is'. 'Fields in southern area' is vague; 'fields in southern regions' is better. Add verbs to complete the clauses. Grammar problem type ID:26