视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar, and use clear linking to add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and pronunciation errors (e.g. "guy" -> "when"; "children's playing those" -> "children playing"). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and start with a topic sentence, then provide examples using linking words like "for example" or "such as."

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes. For example, when I travel I always bring my camera to capture sunrises and sunsets as well as candid moments of children playing in parks.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, and add a specific contrast and reason with a linking word. Mention one or two concrete examples (e.g. misty fields, quiet lakes) to strengthen your point. Keep sentences varied in structure and check small grammar issues ("in my opinion" can be reduced).

範例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more scenic. For instance, I like photographing misty fields and quiet lakes at sunrise, whereas urban scenes often feel crowded and noisy.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating phrases like "in my opinion". Give specific reasons and one concrete example of a cultural site or festival. Use linking words (e.g. "because", "for example", "therefore") and keep the answer to 2–3 well-formed sentences.

範例: I prefer photographing views in my own country because it has diverse cultural festivals and historic sites. For example, I often photograph temple processions and colorful market scenes, which provide unique and meaningful images.

× Yes, I do for sure.

✓ Yes, I do, for sure.

Missing punctuation and natural adverb placement: add a comma after 'do' to separate the affirmative response from the adverbial phrase. This improves fluency and clarity.

× I like very much taking pictures of different views.

✓ I very much like taking pictures of different views.

Adverb placement: 'very much' should come before the verb phrase 'like taking' for natural English word order. Move 'very much' before 'like'.

× Whenever guy I go to new places, I bring my camera with myself.

✓ Whenever I go to new places, I bring my camera with me.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'guy' is incorrect and unnecessary; remove it. Use correct subject order 'Whenever I go'. Use 'me' instead of 'myself' because 'myself' is a reflexive pronoun used when the subject and object are the same for emphasis.

× I capture different images of sunset, sunrise and always I likes to capture new moments, for example children's playing those.

✓ I capture different images of sunsets and sunrises, and I always like to capture new moments, for example children playing.

Subject-verb agreement and pluralization: 'likes' should be 'like' to agree with subject 'I'. Use plural forms 'sunsets' and 'sunrises' for general activities. 'Children's playing those' is incorrect: use 'children playing' and remove 'those' which is unnecessary.

× Yes, I prefer views in rural areas because in my opinion, urban areas are more crowded and rural areas have more natural beauty.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in rural areas because, in my opinion, urban areas are more crowded and rural areas have more natural beauty.

Punctuation and sentence flow: add commas around 'in my opinion' as a parenthetical phrase to improve clarity and flow.

× I always prefer to photograph natural beauty as compared to urban areas.

✓ I prefer to photograph natural scenery rather than urban scenes.

Comparative phrasing: 'as compared to' is wordy; use 'rather than' for comparison. 'Natural scenery' and 'urban scenes' are more natural collocations.

× So I always like to capture sunset, sunrise and rain.

✓ So I always like to capture sunsets, sunrises, and rain.

Pluralization and parallel nouns: use plural 'sunsets' and 'sunrises' when speaking generally. Keep items parallel in a list.

× I prefer views in my own country as compared to other countries because in my opinion my country is rich in culture, festivals and rich in cultural places.

✓ I prefer views in my own country to those in other countries because, in my opinion, my country is rich in culture, festivals, and cultural sites.

Comparison structure: use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A as compared to B'. Also avoid repeating 'rich': replace 'rich in cultural places' with 'cultural sites' for concision. Add comma after 'opinion'.

× So I can visit many places where I can click photographs and post them.

✓ So I can visit many places where I can take photographs and post them.

Word choice/pronoun: 'click photographs' is nonstandard; use 'take photographs' or 'take photos'. The rest is fine.

× So in my opinion, I will always choose my country and photographing.

✓ So, in my opinion, I will always choose my country for taking photographs.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'choose my country and photographing' is ungrammatical. Use 'choose my country for taking photographs' to express preference clearly. Add comma after introductory phrase.