视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện: Hãy trả lời ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ; dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể kèm liên từ. Chú ý phát âm các từ như "scenery" và tránh filler như "umm"; giới hạn 3–4 câu. Ví dụ: mở đầu trực tiếp (I enjoy...), sau đó nêu một hoặc hai đối tượng cụ thể (landscapes, food) và lý do ngắn gọn.

範例: I enjoy taking photos of everyday scenes. For example, I often photograph cityscapes at sunset and street food because the colours and atmosphere are interesting. I also like candid shots of people since they capture real emotions.

建議: Cải thiện: Tránh nói lan man và lặp từ; đưa ra câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer...), lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng từ chính xác (favourite/prefer, familiar) và bỏ filler. Giữ 2–3 câu liên kết bằng from/so/because.

範例: I prefer urban views because I live in the city and feel more familiar with its architecture and street life. For instance, I enjoy photographing busy markets and modern buildings which create dynamic compositions.

建議: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời rõ ràng (I prefer...), cung cấp lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm; sửa ngữ pháp (I grew up, I am very familiar) và tránh nói lặp. Giữ 2–3 câu mạch lạc, sử dụng linking words như because and for example.

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up in Ho Chi Minh City and know its unique character. For example, I like photographing Vietnamese street life and historic neighbourhoods, and I think these images help others learn about Vietnam.

× I love taking different pictures of different real life like umm actually like whenever I see something pretty I always set up my camera and take up this.

✓ I love taking different pictures of real life; whenever I see something pretty I always set up my camera and take it.

The phrase 'take up this' is incorrect: after 'set up my camera' the verb should be 'take' with the object 'it' or 'a picture'. Use 'taking' correctly as a gerund after 'love'. Also remove redundant 'different' and filler words for clarity. Suggestion: use 'take it' or 'take a picture' and keep the gerund 'taking'.

× I love taking pictures of like sceneries, people, food, anymore anything you see that appealing to me, I always take a lot of pictures of that.

✓ I love taking pictures of scenery, people, food, or anything that appeals to me; I always take a lot of photos of those things.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of 'sceneries'. 'Anymore' is incorrect in this context. Use 'anything that appeals to me' (verb agreement: 'appeals'). Replace 'pictures' with 'photos' or keep 'pictures' but ensure number agreement with 'those things'.

× Umm, I think like different areas we have like different things for us to catch up on.

✓ I think different areas have different things for us to discover.

'Areas' plural is fine, but phrase 'catch up on' is inappropriate; 'discover' or 'experience' fits better. Also remove unnecessary fillers. Ensure subject and verb are concise: 'different areas have different things'.

× So, and I do have, and I actually do not have any favours over something.

✓ I don't have a particular preference for anything.

'Do not have any favours over something' is ungrammatical. Use 'preference' as the correct noun. Ensure verb contraction 'don't have' matches singular subject 'I'.

× So I would say umm because like I live in urban areas, I would say I prefer a bit for urban area because I so familiar with that.

✓ I would say that because I live in an urban area, I prefer urban views a bit more because I am so familiar with them.

Use present simple 'I live' correctly and 'I am so familiar' (missing 'am'). 'Urban area' should be singular with article 'an' when referring to where the speaker lives. Match pronoun and plural: 'them' refers to 'urban views' or 'areas'.

× Umm, because like I have grew up in Ho Chi Minh City and I very familiar with that.

✓ I grew up in Ho Chi Minh City and I am very familiar with it.

Use simple past 'grew up' not 'have grew up' (incorrect combination). Alternatively 'have grown up' (present perfect) could be used but then 'have grown up' must pair with 'in Ho Chi Minh City' and context. Also add 'am' for 'I am very familiar' and use pronoun 'it' for the city.

× So I would say I would prefer my own homes country view as well because there's a lot of things that people need to know more about Ho Chi Minh City in specific and Vietnam in general.

✓ I would say I prefer views of my own home country because there are a lot of things people should know about Ho Chi Minh City in particular and Vietnam in general.

Use 'views of my own home country' (preposition 'of'). 'Homes' should be 'home' (possessive not required). Use 'there are' for plural 'a lot of things'. 'In specific' should be 'in particular'.

× We have a lot of different landscape, basically Hanoi itself, yeah.

✓ We have a lot of different landscapes, for example Hanoi itself.

Use plural 'landscapes' to match 'a lot of'. Provide clearer connector 'for example' instead of 'basically'.