视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên và mạch lạc bằng cách loại bỏ từ thừa và sửa lỗi nhỏ; thêm liên từ phù hợp; dùng từ vựng cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: 'shoreline', 'skyscrapers', 'sunset') và chú ý phát âm (loại trùng từ như "the the"). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 4–5 câu, và tránh lặp ý.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural landscapes such as mountains and shorelines. Photography helps me preserve memories and notice the beauty around me. I also like cityscapes, particularly at night when skyscrapers and streetlights create dramatic scenes.

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (chủ-động, số ít/ số nhiều), cấu trúc câu và mạch logic; dùng liên từ để nối ý; tránh tiếng lấp (uh). Cụ thể sửa các lỗi: 'consists of different natural scenes' → 'consist of natural scenes', 'It provide' → 'They provide' hoặc 'They offer'. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa vì sao bạn thích vùng nông thôn (ví dụ: không khí trong lành, ít tiếng ồn).

範例: I prefer rural views because they consist of a variety of natural scenes like mountains and beaches. They offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, which feels very refreshing compared with the crowded and noisy urban landscape.

建議: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng và trôi chảy: tránh tiếng lặp, ngắt quãng và từ không rõ nghĩa; trả lời trực tiếp kèm lý do cụ thể. Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề → lý do → ví dụ. Tránh nói lặp như 'scene' nhiều lần; thay bằng lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: tìm kiếm sự mới mẻ, phong cảnh khác biệt, trải nghiệm văn hóa).

範例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures. For example, travelling abroad has allowed me to see coastal cliffs and unique architectures that I haven't seen in my home country, which keeps photography exciting.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes like mountains or beach.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes like mountains or the beach.

Use of articles: 'beach' as a singular countable noun in this general example needs the definite article 'the' when contrasted with 'mountains' or use plural 'beaches'. Suggestion: say 'the beach' or 'beaches' to be grammatically correct.

× I think photography is a good way to keep memories and appreciate the beauty around us.

✓ I think photography is a good way to preserve memories and appreciate the beauty around us.

Word choice: 'keep memories' is not natural English; use the verb 'preserve' or the phrase 'keep memories alive'. Suggestion: replace 'keep memories' with 'preserve memories' for clarity and correctness.

× Sometimes I also take photos of city views because the the light and building can look very impressive, especially at night.

✓ Sometimes I also take photos of city views because the light and buildings can look very impressive, especially at night.

Subject-verb and plural agreement: 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'the light and buildings' as two items. Also duplicate 'the the' is a typographical error. Suggestion: use plural nouns when listing multiple items.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it consists of different naturals scenes like mountain or beach.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they consist of different natural scenes like mountains or beaches.

Singular/plural and adjective form: 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'views' so use 'they'. 'naturals' is incorrect as an adjective; use 'natural'. 'mountain or beach' should be plural to match 'scenes' or change structure. Suggestion: ensure subject-number agreement and correct adjective form.

× It provide a fresh and positive energy is different to urban areas with dense and heavy uh landscape.

✓ They provide a fresh and positive energy, which is different from urban areas with dense and heavy landscapes.

Subject-verb agreement and connectors: 'It provide' is wrong; use 'They provide' to agree with plural 'views' or 'scenes'. Use 'which is different from' rather than 'is different to'. 'landscape' should be plural to match description. Suggestion: match subject number and use correct comparative connector and plural nouns.

× Uh, you know, Ignat Ignatian in the world have their own landscape.

✓ Uh, you know, people in the world have their own landscapes.

Confused noun and name: 'Ignat Ignatian' seems incorrect; likely meant 'people'. Also 'have' should agree with plural 'people' and 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. Suggestion: use clear subject 'people' and plural nouns.

× Uh, in my opinion, I prefer the views in other countries because I have witnessed the scenery, the scene in my own country.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, I prefer the views in other countries because I have already seen the scenery in my own country.

Tense and word choice: 'have witnessed' is grammatically possible but sounds formal; 'have already seen' is more natural. Repetition 'the scenery, the scene' is redundant. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and appropriate present perfect for life experience.

× Oh scene, I was a child so oh, I was bored.

✓ I saw those scenes when I was a child, so I got bored.

Tense and clarity: 'Oh scene' is incomplete; clarify with 'I saw those scenes'. Use past simple 'was' for time reference and 'got bored' for resulting state. Suggestion: express past experiences clearly with past simple verbs.