视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Replace vague phrases like "lack the technical skills" with a brief specific example (e.g., "I struggle with exposure and composition"). Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "however", "for example").

範例: Yes — I really enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often try to capture mountain sunrises, although I sometimes struggle with exposure and composition, so I’m learning to use manual settings to improve my shots.

建議: Give one clear topic sentence and provide two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like "uh" and list items more smoothly. Mention specific scenes or feelings to make the answer richer.

範例: I prefer rural views because I love being close to nature and photographing sunsets. For instance, I enjoy mountain ridgelines at dusk and sandy beaches at golden hour because the light creates dramatic colours.

建議: Start with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and an example. Remove hesitation fillers ("umm") and redundancies ("travel outside or travel abroad"). Use a linking word to explain why different views excite you.

範例: It doesn’t really matter to me, but I’m especially excited by views I haven’t seen before. For example, when I visit another country I take many photos of unique landscapes because those sceneries are rare at home.

× It has always been my passion to take pictures of different sceneries.

✓ It has always been my passion to take pictures of different scenes.

The word 'sceneries' is not commonly used in English; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun or use the countable plural 'scenes'. This is a vocabulary/word-formation issue that aligns with incorrect verb/noun form. Suggest using 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes' (countable) depending on meaning. Example: 'different scenery' or 'different scenes'.

× However, I think I lack the technical skills to take or to capture great photos of nature.

✓ However, I think I lack the technical skills to take or capture great photos of nature.

Using both 'to take' and 'to capture' is redundant; after 'to', parallel infinitives should match. Remove the second 'to' for correct parallel structure: 'to take or capture'. This is an issue with verb form/parallelism; ensure infinitives are coordinated correctly.

× I prefer the rural views because I am into nature and I love capturing sunsets.

✓ I prefer rural views because I am into nature and I love capturing sunsets.

The phrase 'the rural views' is grammatical but unnecessary article usage can sound odd; removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural. This relates to article/usage; choose 'rural views' for general preference. Also no change needed for verb agreement here.

× So whenever I travel outside or if I travel abroad, umm I always take a lot of picture because I know that these sceneries are not really common.

✓ So whenever I travel abroad, I always take a lot of pictures because I know that these scenes are not really common.

Multiple issues: 'take a lot of picture' should be 'take a lot of pictures' (plural noun after 'a lot of'); 'travel outside or if I travel abroad' is redundant—use one phrase like 'travel abroad'; 'sceneries' is incorrect as noted earlier—use 'scenes' or 'scenery'. These are pluralization and word-choice errors. Suggestions: use 'travel abroad' and 'take a lot of pictures' and 'these scenes' or 'this scenery'.

× Mountain views, uh, what else? Uh, the beaches.

✓ Mountain views, uh, what else? Uh, beaches.

Fragment 'the beaches' is a short, spoken fragment; dropping 'the' yields a natural list of examples. The issue is article usage and sentence fragment; list items in this context are better without 'the'. If forming a full sentence, supply a verb: 'I also like beaches.'