视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Correct grammar (use plural/singular and articles) and avoid repetition. Use linking words if you add details.

範例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views with my own camera. For example, my city has many scenic spots by the river and old streets, so I often go out at weekends to capture interesting compositions.

建議: Start with a direct statement (I prefer urban views). Fix tense and grammar (use plural/singular, avoid slang like 'gonna'). Provide one clear reason and a linked example using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Keep to under five sentences.

範例: I prefer views in urban areas because cityscapes have dramatic contrasts of light and architecture. For example, at sunrise and sunset the skyline looks spectacular, so I often photograph rooftops and riversides during those times.

建議: Give a clear preference (e.g., I prefer views in my country) and explain why with specific details. Correct phrasing and coherence: avoid run-on sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Mention one specific scene to illustrate your point.

範例: I prefer the views in my own country because the landscapes are varied and familiar to me. For example, watching the sunset from a mountain overlooking the sea is breathtaking and I can capture unique colors and local scenery.

× Yes, I'd like to do this with my own camera and there's a lot of views in my city, which is very beautiful and I like it.

✓ Yes, I'd like to do that with my own camera, and there are a lot of views in my city, which is very beautiful and I like it.

The pronoun 'this' is less appropriate than 'that' when referring to the activity in general; change is optional but improves clarity. More importantly, 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' (singular) and does not agree with the plural noun 'a lot of views'. Use 'there are' for plural subjects. Suggestion: use 'there are a lot of views' and keep consistent pronouns: 'do that' or 'take pictures'.

× I prefer it in urban areas and especially when the sunset and the sunrise also are perfect.

✓ I prefer urban areas, especially when the sunset and the sunrise are perfect.

The phrase 'I prefer it in urban areas' uses 'it' awkwardly; better to say 'I prefer urban areas'. 'Also are perfect' places the auxiliary 'are' after 'also', which is unnatural; the correct subject-verb order is 'the sunset and the sunrise are perfect'. This fixes third person plural verb agreement and word order.

× And I like the view on a lot of time.

✓ And I like the view a lot of the time.

The original misorders words and uses 'on' incorrectly. The correct idiom is 'a lot of the time' meaning 'often'. No gerund is required here; reorder to 'I like the view a lot of the time'.

× Let's just say in the morning and the late evening, it will be the very beautiful and the view are gonna be very awesome.

✓ Let's just say that in the morning and late evening the views are very beautiful and are going to be awesome.

Multiple issues: 'Let's just say in the morning and the late evening' needs 'that' to introduce the clause. 'It will be the very beautiful' uses 'it' and 'the' incorrectly and 'very beautiful' should modify 'views' (plural). 'the view are gonna be very awesome' has subject-verb disagreement ('view' singular with 'are') and uses informal 'gonna'. Correct to plural 'views are going to be very awesome' or 'will be beautiful'. Use 'going to' instead of 'gonna' in formal speech.

× I like it in several country including my country also, but in my country particularly will be very nice and beautiful and you'll find the sunset from the views above the mountain and under the mountain near the sea the view will be amazing.

✓ I like it in several countries including my own, but in my country in particular it is very nice and beautiful; you can see sunsets from viewpoints above the mountains and below them near the sea, and the views are amazing.

'Several country' uses incorrect number agreement; use the plural 'several countries'. 'Including my country also' is redundant; 'including my own' is more natural. The clause 'in my country particularly will be very nice' lacks a subject and proper word order; insert 'it is' or 'in particular it is'. 'The sunset from the views above the mountain and under the mountain near the sea' is confusing: use plural 'mountains' and 'viewpoints', and separate ideas with commas or conjunctions. Ensure subject-verb agreement with 'the views are amazing'.