视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid filled pauses (“uh”, “like”) and repetition. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., “Rd.” → “roads”, “giving me a good vibes” → “giving me good vibes” or “making me feel good”).

範例: I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially sunrises and sunsets. For example, when I walk in a park I often photograph flower beds because their colors and details create a peaceful, aesthetic scene. This hobby helps me relax and capture memories.

建議: Give a clear preference or say you like both but explain differences succinctly. Use linking words (however, whereas, for example) and avoid filler words. Use specific vocabulary (architecture, farmland, cottages) and correct phrases (“horse houses” → “stables” or “horses”).

範例: I like both urban and rural views because they offer different charms. For example, urban areas have striking architecture and street scenes, whereas rural areas offer rolling fields, farmhouses and stables. Therefore I enjoy photographing both depending on the mood.

建議: Answer directly and provide a clear reason with a specific example. Use correct prepositions (“in my country”), and avoid repetition. Add a linking phrase (for example, for instance) and briefly explain why local sites appeal to you (history, familiarity, accessibility).

範例: I prefer views in my own country because I can easily visit many historic and scenic sites. For instance, monuments like the Taj Mahal and Red Fort offer unique architecture and cultural significance, so I enjoy photographing them when I travel locally.

× Yes I do like taking pictures of different views like sunset, sunrise and when I'm walking on the road I do take the pictures of Rd. like I'm kinda aesthetic person so I like taking pictures aesthetically of different kind of views whenever I am in a park and there are many flowers and this kind giving me a uh like a good vibes.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, such as sunsets and sunrises. When I'm walking on the road, I take pictures because I'm kind of an aesthetic person, so I like photographing different kinds of views aesthetically. Whenever I am in a park with many flowers, it gives me good vibes.

The original sentence misuses gerunds and verb forms and is run-on. 'Taking pictures' is fine, but phrases like 'this kind giving me' are incorrect; use 'it gives me'. Also 'different kind of views' should be 'different kinds of views'. Break into shorter sentences and use 'photographing' or 'take pictures' consistently for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms with -ing when functioning as nouns and ensure verbs agree with subjects and are complete (e.g., 'it gives me' not 'giving me').

× I prefer both areas like urban and rural areas, both, uh, in their own way, they have already their different perspectives.

✓ I prefer both urban and rural areas; each has its own perspective.

The original uses 'in their own way' which is awkward and includes unnecessary prepositions. 'Each has its own perspective' is more concise and grammatically correct. Also avoid duplicating 'areas' and use singular 'each' with 'its' for agreement. Suggestion: Use concise prepositional phrases and correct possessive pronouns for singular subjects.

× Like in urban areas, we can uh, click the photos of views aesthetically like buildings.

✓ In urban areas, we can aesthetically photograph views such as buildings.

'Click the photos' is informal and unidiomatic; use 'photograph' or 'take photos'. The placement of 'aesthetically' should modify the verb 'photograph'. 'Like' used repeatedly is filler; replace with 'such as' for examples. Suggestion: Use natural verbs ('photograph', 'take photos') and place adverbs next to the verbs they modify.

× And in rural areas there are also many options like uh, farm houses and uh, horse houses.

✓ In rural areas there are also many options, such as farmhouses and stables for horses.

'Farm houses' should be 'farmhouses' as one word. 'Horse houses' is nonstandard; use 'stables' or 'horse farms'. Also remove fillers and use 'such as' for examples. Suggestion: Use correct compound nouns and precise vocabulary.

× I do prefer views on my country because there are many things to explore in our country like there are many tourist places where we can visit and click picture of the views like Taj Mahal, Red Fort and there are many things to visit.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are many things to explore, such as tourist sites like the Taj Mahal and the Red Fort, where we can take pictures of the views.

Use 'in my country' not 'on my country'. 'Click picture' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'take pictures'. 'Tourist places' is better as 'tourist sites'. Add articles for named monuments ('the Taj Mahal', 'the Red Fort') and reorder for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('in'), natural verbs ('take pictures'), and include definite articles for well-known landmarks.