视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변은 자연스럽고 이유까지 잘 제시했습니다. 다만 응답 길이가 다소 길어질 수 있고 반복(‘feelings’ 관련 표현)이 있으므로 문장을 더 간결하게 정리하고 연결어를 하나만 사용해 흐름을 명확히 하세요. 또한 사진을 찍는 구체적 예시(예: 사용하는 카메라나 좋아하는 구도)를 하나 덧붙이면 더 구체적인 인상을 줄 수 있습니다.

範例: Yes, I love photographing different views. For instance, when I see a stunning coastal sunset while traveling, I often take photos to preserve the colors and mood. I usually focus on the horizon or silhouettes to capture the atmosphere.

建議: 답변의 핵심은 명확하지만 표현에 오류와 어색한 단어(‘to open areas’, ‘green scanner’)가 있어 이해를 방해합니다. 문장 구조를 단순화하고, 비교할 때 적절한 연결어(if/while/and)를 사용하세요. 또한 ‘rural’과 ‘urban’ 비교를 구체적 이유(예: 소음, 자연, 공간감)로 보완하세요.

範例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside is quieter and less crowded. The fresh air and wide green fields help me relax, whereas city streets are usually noisy and busy.

建議: 질문을 재확인하는 표현(‘Or in other countries?’)과 단어 선택(‘business’)이 부적절합니다. 질문에 바로 답하고 이유와 구체적 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 문장 흐름을 위해 연결어(‘because’, ‘for example’)를 적절히 사용하되 불필요한 반복은 피하세요.

範例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer unfamiliar landscapes and cultures that feel refreshing. For example, I love visiting coastal towns abroad where the beaches and local architecture look completely different from those at home.

× I prefer rural areas to open areas because the countryside makes me feel relaxed and at ease.

✓ I prefer rural areas to urban areas because the countryside makes me feel relaxed and at ease.

The student used 'open areas' incorrectly when contrasting urban vs rural; 'urban areas' is the appropriate opposite. Use precise vocabulary to match the intended meaning; replace 'open areas' with 'urban areas'. Also 'countryside' is correct and matches singular collective usage.

× I enjoy the fresh air and green scanner there, which feels more peaceful than busy cities streets.

✓ I enjoy the fresh air and green scenery there, which feels more peaceful than busy city streets.

The word 'scanner' is a wrong word choice; the correct noun is 'scenery'. Also 'cities streets' is incorrect word order and plural form; use 'city streets' to mean the streets of a city. Maintain adjective-noun order and correct singular/plural forms.

× Or in other countries? I prefer business in other countries because I can see different scenery that I haven't seen before and that makes me feel refreshed.

✓ Do you mean in other countries? I prefer being in other countries because I can see different scenery that I haven't seen before, and that makes me feel refreshed.

The student begins with a fragment 'Or in other countries?' which is informal and unclear; replace with 'Do you mean in other countries?' Also 'I prefer business in other countries' is incorrect word choice—'business' should be 'being' to express preference for location. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Use correct verb and clear sentence structure.