视图— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Avoid filler phrases and repetition. Use linking words like “because” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love traveling and capturing memorable scenes. For example, when I visited a coastal town last year, I photographed the sunrise over the sea to remember the peaceful atmosphere.

建議: Give a clear short answer then support it with specific details. Use correct grammar (e.g., “prefer rural areas because they are close to nature”) and linking words like “because” and “so”. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases.

範例: I prefer rural areas because they are closer to nature and feel more peaceful. For example, walking through a countryside trail helps me relax and enjoy bird song, which is very calming compared with busy city streets.

建議: Answer directly and add a specific reason and a concise example. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., “I was so excited when I reached the top”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

範例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many spectacular mountains. For example, last year I climbed a mountain near Nanjing and I was so excited when I reached the top and saw the panoramic scenery.

× Of course I like taking pictures, you know, I love traveling, so why see some beautiful seeing beautiful views? I will take it.

✓ Of course I like taking pictures; I love traveling, so when I see beautiful views, I take photos.

The original sentence contains awkward and incorrect verb forms and structure ('why see some beautiful seeing beautiful views' and 'I will take it'). This is a present habitual action, so use simple present verbs ('see' -> 'see', 'take' -> 'take photos'). Also remove redundant words and correct word choice. Suggestion: keep parallel present tense for habits and use clear nouns ('photos').

× Uh, I think I prefer to the rural areas that because they're closed in the rubber in the rural areas is close to nature and it's may it, it makes me more chill and calming.

✓ Uh, I think I prefer rural areas because they're close to nature, and they make me feel calmer and more relaxed.

Errors include incorrect preposition 'prefer to the rural areas' (should be 'prefer rural areas' or 'prefer the rural areas'), wrong word 'closed' instead of 'close', repeated and garbled phrases, and awkward adverb/adjective use ('chill and calming'). Use 'close to nature' and correct subject-pronoun agreement ('they make me feel calmer and more relaxed'). Use simple present for preferences.

× Of course, I love my own country's views then, because in my country there are lots of mountains, and the the mountain is very spectacular.

✓ Of course I prefer the views in my own country because there are lots of mountains, and the mountains are very spectacular.

Problems: redundant 'then', repeated 'the the', and singular/plural mismatch ('the mountain is' vs 'lots of mountains'). Use simple present for general facts and ensure number agreement ('mountains are'). Also use 'prefer' to match question context.

× For example, last year I climbed the mountain in Nanjing. When I come to the top of mountain is so excited.

✓ For example, last year I climbed a mountain in Nanjing. When I reached the top of the mountain, I was so excited.

Tense errors and article use: 'come' should be past tense 'reached' to match 'last year I climbed'; missing articles ('a mountain', 'the mountain'); subject-verb agreement and past-state description require past tense 'was so excited'. Ensure consistent past tense for completed past events.